Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one brief specific reason or detail. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy (e.g. “that about bike”). Use linking words to connect ideas. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use more accurate vocabulary (fascinated → interested).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My brother and cousins did, but I wasn’t very interested in cycling because I preferred reading and indoor games. However, I sometimes borrowed a bike to ride with them on weekends.

제안: Clarify and correct grammar while giving a specific supporting detail. Start with a direct answer, then add a clear, relevant reason or example. Use linking words (e.g. “because,” “for example”) and correct collocations (commute by bike, university students). Avoid unclear phrases like “winning students.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many university students commute to campus by bike to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× I did not have a bike when I was a kid, but my brother and my cousins had bikes.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a kid, but my brother and my cousins did.

The original sentence uses 'had bikes' which is grammatically acceptable, but repeating 'had bikes' is wordy. More natural is to use 'did' to avoid repetition while keeping past tense. Keep tense consistent: 'did not have' and 'did' both past simple. Suggestion: use auxiliary 'do' in past ('did') to avoid repeating the noun.

× I was not actually that much fascinated by that about bike.

✓ I was not actually that fascinated by bikes.

The phrase 'that much fascinated by that about bike' is grammatically incorrect. Use 'fascinated by' to indicate the object of fascination, and 'that' as an adverb before the adjective 'fascinated' is fine: 'not that fascinated'. Also use plural 'bikes' or 'a bike' depending on meaning. Simplify to 'I was not actually that fascinated by bikes.'

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country.

'Bikes' is acceptable in speech, but in a formal response 'bicycles' is stylistically preferable. No grammatical error in original; this is a stylistic improvement to match formality of test answers.

× Moreover, college or university winning students most often by use bikes to commute to their campus.

✓ Moreover, college and university students most often use bikes to commute to campus.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and extraneous words ('winning', 'by use'). Correct structure: subject 'college and university students', adverb 'most often', verb 'use', object 'bikes', purpose 'to commute to campus'. This keeps present simple tense for general fact.