Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you had a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and word order. Use linking words (for example, 'but' or 'so') to connect ideas and avoid repetitions. Correct common grammar mistakes: use simple past for completed actions (e.g., 'my dad bought me a bike'), say 'it was a bit too high for me' and use 'ride' rather than 'drive' for a bicycle. Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes. My dad bought me a blue bicycle when I was 13. It was a bit too tall for me at first, so I was scared to ride it. After a few weeks of practice, I became more confident and could ride around the neighborhood.

제안: Answer directly then give clear specific reasons and one brief example. Avoid vague or ungrammatical phrases—use plural/singular correctly and state reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'so'. For instance, say 'Yes, bikes are very popular because they are affordable and practical for short trips.' Don’t generalize without support; mention who uses them (students, workers) and typical uses (commuting, shopping). Keep sentences well-formed and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars. As a result, families often own at least one bicycle for daily tasks. For example, students and market vendors commonly use bikes to commute and carry small goods.

× When I turned 13 my dad used to buy bought me a bike.

✓ When I turned 13 my dad bought me a bike.

The sentence mixes 'used to buy' (habitual) with simple past 'bought', causing redundancy and incorrect form. Use simple past 'bought' to describe a single past event. If intending a repeated action, use 'used to buy' with no past-tense 'bought'. Suggestion: choose one form: 'my dad bought me a bike' or 'my dad used to buy me bikes' depending on meaning.

× It was blue one.

✓ It was a blue one.

The noun phrase needs an article before 'blue one'. Use the indefinite article 'a' with 'one' to indicate a single item. Alternatively say 'It was blue.' Suggestion: say 'It was a blue one.' or 'It was blue.'.

× It was a little higher than my high and I was so scared to drive, ride, ride the bike itself.

✓ It was a little taller than me and I was too scared to ride the bike.

Phrase 'higher than my high' is ungrammatical; use 'taller than me' for height comparison. 'Scared to drive, ride, ride' is repetitive and 'drive' is wrong for a bike; use 'ride' once. Also 'the bike itself' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use clear comparative structure and single appropriate verb: 'It was a little taller than me and I was too scared to ride it.'.

× It's extremely high and at least.

✓ It was extremely high, at least it felt that way.

Mixes present 'It's' with past context; tense should be past. 'And at least' is incomplete. Clarify the thought: 'at least it felt that way' or remove 'at least'. Suggestion: 'It was extremely high; at least it felt that way.'.

× As I live in a poor country, we don't have cars to go places to places, we have to take the bikes.

✓ As I live in a poor country, many people don't have cars to go places, so they have to use bikes.

Awkward phrasing 'go places to places' and 'take the bikes' is incorrect collocation. Use 'go places' once and 'use bikes' or 'take bikes'. Also 'we don't have cars' generalization changed to 'many people don't have cars' to match intended meaning. Suggestion: 'many people don't have cars ... so they have to use bikes.'.

× Most of the people need bikes.

✓ Most people need bikes.

'Most of the people' is wordy and usually 'Most people' is preferred. Not strictly plural error but redundancy; correction makes it natural. Suggestion: use 'Most people'.

× A household have a bike and lease and we use it as.

✓ A household has a bike and they use it for transport.

Subject-verb agreement: 'A household' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. 'Lease' is unclear; likely meant 'least' or 'at least' or 'shared'. Clarified to 'they use it for transport'. Suggestion: 'A household has a bike and they use it for transport.'.