Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct tense and modal use, and add one brief specific detail. Use a linking word to connect the reason and the wish.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my father was worried I might get injured. However, I was always fascinated by cycling, and I still wish I could learn to ride now so I can exercise outdoors more often.

제안: Good content and coherence; reduce hesitation and improve vocabulary variety. Combine related reasons with linking words and add a brief specific example or statistic to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them for exercise and to stay healthy, and because cars are expensive, students and commuters often use bikes for daily travel; for example, I see dozens of cyclists every morning near the university.

× I never had a bike as a child because my father was worried I might get injured, uh, but I was really like the idea of uh, cycling though, umm, I wish I can, uh, ride the bike again.

✓ I never had a bike as a child because my father was worried I might get injured, but I really liked the idea of cycling, and I wish I could ride a bike again.

Errors: 'was really like the idea' uses wrong verb form and tense; should be 'really liked' (past simple) to match 'never had' and past time frame. 'I wish I can' is incorrect for a past/unreal desire—use 'I wish I could' to express ability in a hypothetical or desire. Also remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past time when talking about childhood and use 'wish' + past modal (could) for unreal or desired ability.

× Well, yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. I see many people, uh, riding them for exercise and as, uh, a way to stay healthy. And another reason is 'cause many people, especially students, cannot afford cars, so they use bicycles for daily commuting.

✓ Well, yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. I see many people riding them for exercise and as a way to stay healthy. Another reason is that many people, especially students, cannot afford cars, so they use bicycles for daily commuting.

Errors: 'as, uh, a way' has unnecessary commas; punctuation/fillers affect flow rather than grammar. Use 'as a way' without commas. Informal ' 'cause' should be 'that' or 'because' in spoken but for grammatical correctness use 'that' or 'because'; here 'that' fits after 'Another reason is'. Suggestion: remove filler words and use 'that' or 'because' for clarity and more formal correctness. Present tense usage otherwise is correct.