Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, avoid unrelated phrases (e.g. “Without your mind”), and add one or two concise supporting details. Use linking words if you add more than one detail. Keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was a child and I rode it to visit my friends every afternoon. Because my house was near a park, I have many happy memories of riding there with my brother.

제안: Answer directly, fix grammar and repetition, and complete your thought. Use specific reasons and a linking word (e.g. 'because' or 'so') and give one concrete example. Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper than cars and use less fuel. For example, many students and delivery workers prefer motorcycles for short trips in cities, especially when traffic is heavy.

× Without your mind. Yes, I had a bike at my childhood period and I have lot of memories with my bike.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, and I have a lot of memories with it.

The phrase 'Without your mind.' is ungrammatical and irrelevant; likely intended to mean 'Without a doubt' or similar, so remove or replace it. 'At my childhood period' is incorrect prepositional phrase; use 'when I was a child' to indicate time. 'I have lot of memories' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'lot'. Also avoid repeating 'my bike' after 'a bike'—use the pronoun 'it' for cohesion. Combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for correct sentence structure. Suggestion: Say 'I had a bike when I was a child, and I have a lot of memories with it.'.

× Yes, yes bikes are popular in our country because it is a cheaper mode as compared to other vehicles like cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they are a cheaper mode of transport compared to cars.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so the pronoun must be plural: 'they' not 'it'. 'A cheaper mode' is followed by 'of transport' to specify what mode. 'As compared to' is wordy; use 'compared to' or 'than'. Also remove redundant 'yes, yes' and ensure verb agreement: 'bikes are'. Suggestion: Say 'Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they are a cheaper mode of transport compared to cars.'.

× It requires less fuel as required to car and also it is a.

✓ They require less fuel than cars, and they are easy to park and maintain.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'It requires less fuel as required to car' mixes singular pronoun with plural subject and an incorrect comparative structure. Use plural 'they' for 'bikes' and compare with 'than cars'. The fragment 'and also it is a.' is incomplete; finish the thought with a clear adjective or clause such as 'easy to park and maintain.' Suggestion: Say 'They require less fuel than cars, and they are easy to park and maintain.'.