Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repetition and use correct tense and articles. Also link ideas (e.g. 'but after' or 'so') and correct phrasing like 'learned to ride' instead of 'learned it'.

예시: Yes. My father bought me a bicycle when I was a child. I tried to learn to ride it one afternoon, but I fell and broke my confidence, so I stopped practicing for a while. However, I regretted it later and wished I had kept trying.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, avoid filler words, and expand with specific reasons and examples using linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'they are popular', 'in my city' not repeating phrases) and more precise vocabulary like 'shared bike schemes' or 'traffic congestion'.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, in my city, Nanjing, there are many shared-bike schemes available, which people use because traffic congestion is common and bikes are often faster for short trips.

× Actually my father bought me a bicycle in my childhood and I learned it one day but but that day I fell down from it so I gave up learning it.

✓ Actually my father bought me a bicycle when I was a child and I learned to ride it in one day, but that day I fell off it so I gave up learning.

Multiple issues: use 'when I was a child' instead of 'in my childhood' for natural English (tense/context), and 'learned to ride it' requires the infinitive 'to ride' rather than just 'learned it' (verb + -ing/infinitive issue related to item 8/9 but within past-tense narrative). 'One day' should be 'in one day' to show duration. 'Fell down from it' is unnatural; use 'fell off it'. The sentence also had a duplicated 'but but'. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and keep past tense consistent: 'bought', 'learned', 'fell', 'gave up'.

× Ah, actually it is. Take my take my city Nanjing as an example.

✓ Ah, actually they are. Take my city, Nanjing, as an example.

The question asked about 'bikes' (plural), so the correct pronoun is 'they' not 'it' (subject-verb/pronoun agreement). Also 'take my take my city' repeats a phrase; remove the duplication. Add commas around the city name for clarity. Suggestion: match noun number with pronoun and proofread to remove repeated words.

× There are lots of shared bicycles in our city because traffic jams appeared frequently.

✓ There are lots of shared bicycles in our city because traffic jams occur frequently.

Use 'occur' rather than 'appeared' for habitual or repeated events; 'appeared' suggests a one-time event. 'Occur frequently' is the natural collocation. Also keep present simple for general facts: 'are' and 'occur' rather than past tense. Suggestion: use present simple when stating general truths and choose correct verbs that collocate with 'frequently'.