Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense consistency and fillers. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), and add one or two specific details using a linking word to make the answer cohesive. Keep it under five short sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a large sports bike when I was a child. My parents bought one for my sister and me, and we often rode it on the street outside our house. Because the area was quiet, I felt confident practising tricks and riding fast.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with two specific reasons, using linking words (for example, moreover, because) and avoid hesitations. Use more precise vocabulary (bike share schemes, e-bikes, commuter cycling) to show range.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, bike-share schemes and e-bikes are widespread in cities, which makes cycling convenient for commuters. Moreover, many people use specialized road and mountain bikes for exercise and sport.

× Yes, I have a big sports bike.

✓ Yes, I had a big sports bike.

The examiner asked about possession when you were a child, which requires past tense. Using 'have' (present tense) is inconsistent with the time reference 'when I was a child.' Change to 'had' to match past context and maintain correct chronological reference. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when referring to past time frames; practice forming past simple for 'have' -> 'had'.

× When I was a child, my parents bought it for me and my sister, uh, for us to ride downstairs at our house.

✓ When I was a child, my parents bought it for my sister and me so we could ride it near our house.

The original uses 'for me and my sister' which is grammatically acceptable but 'my sister and me' is the preferred natural order; 'for us to ride downstairs at our house' is awkward and 'downstairs' is odd for riding a bike. Also verb structure 'for us to ride' is less natural than 'so we could ride it.' The sentence refers to a past event, so past modal 'could' fits. Suggestion: Use natural noun order 'my sister and me' and a clearer purpose clause 'so we could ride it near our house.'

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country given the advanced transport, uh, technology.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because of advanced transport technology.

The phrase 'given the advanced transport, uh, technology' is awkward; 'given' can work but 'because of' is clearer. Also remove the filler 'uh' and the comma between 'transport' and 'technology.' Suggestion: Use concise cause structures like 'because of' or 'due to' and avoid filler words in formal responses.

× We have bikes for rental, we have electric bikes, we have all kinds of bicycles, umm, for sports as well.

✓ We have bikes for rent, electric bikes, and all kinds of bicycles for sports as well.

'Bikes for rental' is non-idiomatic; 'bikes for rent' or 'rental bikes' is correct. The original lists items with repetitive 'we have' which is acceptable but can be more concise with commas and 'and.' Remove filler 'umm.' Suggestion: Use idiomatic expressions ('for rent' or 'rental bikes') and concise list structures.