Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly add one supporting detail. Avoid unnecessary words and correct verb forms and possession. For example, say whether you owned it or borrowed it and add a short detail about how often you used it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it actually belonged to my sister. I used it almost every weekend to ride around the neighborhood, and I learned to balance on it within a few days.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and linking words, and give a specific reason or example. Avoid fillers like “umm” and incorrect grammar (e.g., 'rode' -> 'ride', 'because of there's' -> 'because there is'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking phrases such as 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, biking is becoming more popular in my country because many young people choose it for exercise and commuting. For example, I often see groups of cyclists in the park on weekends, and a recent TV show about urban cycling has also increased interest.

× Yes, I had, but it's originally owned by my sister.

✓ Yes, I did, but it originally belonged to my sister.

The student used 'had' awkwardly with comma and mixed present passive 'is originally owned' with past context. The correct past tense for possession is 'did' in response to 'Did you have...', and 'originally belonged' correctly places ownership in the past. Also replace 'it's' with 'it' for subject of 'belonged'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events (e.g., 'Yes, I did' and 'it belonged to...').

× I think it's getting popular right now because I have noticed a lot of young people rode bikes and I guess umm, because of there's a umm show or TV show right now that shows a lot of bikers that rode.

✓ I think it's becoming popular right now because I have noticed a lot of young people riding bikes, and I guess it's because there is a TV show right now that features many bikers.

Multiple issues: 'getting popular' is acceptable but 'becoming popular' is smoother; 'have noticed a lot of young people rode bikes' mixes present perfect with simple past — after 'have noticed' use a gerund 'riding'. 'Because of there's a umm show' is incorrect structure; use 'because there is' or 'because of a show'. 'That shows a lot of bikers that rode' is redundant and mixes tenses — use 'features many bikers' or 'who ride'. Suggestions: maintain consistent present perfect or present continuous structures, use gerunds after 'notice', avoid filler words, and use correct clause structures ('because there is a show' or 'because of a show').