Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and incorrect verb forms (use simple past). Be specific about reasons and timeframe.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My mother was worried I might get hurt if I fell, so she didn't allow me to ride one until I was ten years old.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons with linking words and avoid fillers. Use more precise vocabulary (commute, affordable, convenient) and correct collocations (four-wheeled cars, daily destinations). Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and fuel-efficient way to commute. In addition, they are convenient for short trips and help people avoid traffic, so many workers choose bikes for daily travel.

× Uh, no, I was not having any bike when I was a child.

✓ Uh, no, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The verb 'have' for possession in simple past uses the auxiliary 'did' plus the base verb: 'did not have.' Using 'was not having' incorrectly applies continuous aspect to a stative verb. Use simple past for possession. Suggestion: Use 'did not have' for past possession and avoid continuous form with stative verbs.

× My mother insisted that it could uh, affect my body when I will fall down.

✓ My mother insisted that it could, uh, affect my body if I fell down.

After verbs of insisting, a past modal or past-tense conditional is appropriate. 'When I will fall down' is incorrect in English; in reported or conditional contexts use 'if I fell' or 'when I fell.' Also 'could affect' is fine. Suggestion: Use conditional 'if I fell' or past 'when I fell' instead of 'when I will fall down.'

× So she insisted I should get one at the age of 10.

✓ So she insisted I should get one at the age of 10.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but more natural is 'insisted that I get one at the age of 10' or 'insisted I should get one when I was 10.' However, since only specified grammar types must be corrected and this fits past tense/modal style, no mandatory change required. Suggestion: For clearer past reference use 'when I was 10.'

× Uh, yes, bikes are popular in my country, uh, because they are a very cheap alternative to four Wheeler cars, especially when people have to go somewhere or to their job or to their daily, uh, places.

✓ Uh, yes, bikes are popular in my country, uh, because they are a very cheap alternative to four-wheeler cars, especially when people have to go somewhere, to their job, or to their daily places.

The term 'four Wheeler' should be hyphenated or written as 'four-wheeler' as a compound noun; capitalization is incorrect. Also several small article/word choice issues: 'to their job' is acceptable but 'to work' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'four-wheeler cars' or better 'cars' or 'four-wheelers' and streamline phrases to 'go somewhere, go to work, or go to daily places.'

× It is hassle free, you can take it.

✓ It is hassle-free; you can take one.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing. 'Hassle-free' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. Use a semicolon or split into two sentences and use 'one' to refer to 'a bike.' Suggestion: Say 'It is hassle-free, so you can take one.'