Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use past tense consistently and avoid redundant phrases. For example, change "I have a bike when I was a child" to "I had a bike when I was a child," and replace vague words like "modified me" with the correct action (e.g., "helped me practice").

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. My mother wanted me to learn to ride, so she bought a small training bike for me and helped me practice in our neighborhood park every weekend.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear opinion followed by one or two specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Be specific about what makes bikes popular in some areas (e.g., flat terrain, low cost, limited public transport).

예시: I think bike popularity depends on the region. For example, in the southern rural areas bikes are common because roads are flat, distances are short, and public transport is limited, so many people prefer bicycles for short trips.

× Yeah, sure, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, sure, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: always align verb tense with time expressions (e.g., 'had' for past).

× my mom want me to learn how to ride a bike, so she bought a bike for me and modified me to practice it.

✓ My mom wanted me to learn how to ride a bike, so she bought a bike for me and encouraged me to practice.

'Want' should be in past form 'wanted' to agree with the past time frame. 'Modified me to practice it' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'encouraged me to practice.' Also capitalize sentence start. Suggestion: use past verbs for past narratives and choose appropriate verbs (encourage, help, teach).

× Well, I think it depends. So umm in uh the country of the umm, southern area, because it is not umm well developed, so have a large space umm and also with umm enough.

✓ Well, I think it depends. In the southern rural areas of the country, because they are not well developed, there is a lot of open space and it is more affordable.

Original contains fragmented clauses, missing subjects and verbs, and repetitive fillers. 'so have a large space' lacks subject and verb; use 'there is a lot of open space.' 'the country of the umm, southern area' unclear—rewritten as 'the southern rural areas of the country.' Also ensure subject-verb agreement ('they are not well developed'). Suggestion: remove fillers, use clear subjects and verbs, and combine ideas into coherent sentences.