Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove repetitions and correct grammar (use past simple). Use linking words like “but” or “however” to connect ideas.

예시: I didn’t own a bike when I was a child, but I often borrowed one from a local bike shop. For example, my friends and I would rent bikes at weekends and go on short cycling trips around the neighborhood.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary. Begin with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then explain with a specific contrast (city vs countryside). Use linking words like “however” or “on the other hand” and avoid unclear phrases like “digits” or repeated words.

예시: I think bicycles are popular in some areas of my country, but not everywhere. For example, cycling is rare in busy city centers because roads are crowded; however, it is common in rural areas and new towns where there are safer, quieter roads.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, instead I went I instead.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child; instead, I walked.

The original repeats 'I went I instead' which is ungrammatical and uses an incorrect verb for the intended meaning. The sentence should use the past simple tense consistent with the question (past habit), and a clear verb such as 'walked' or 'rode' must be used. Use a semicolon or conjunction with a comma before 'instead' for correct punctuation and sentence flow. Suggestion: replace the broken phrase with a single past-tense verb and ensure correct punctuation.

× I often went the the bikes from a local bike shop and when I was having some cycling trips with my friends.

✓ I often borrowed bikes from a local bike shop when I went on cycling trips with my friends.

Problems include duplicated word 'the the', incorrect verb choice 'went the bikes', and a clumsy time clause 'when I was having some cycling trips'. The intended meaning is habitual past action, so use past simple 'borrowed' and 'went on cycling trips'. Remove duplicate words and restructure the clause for clarity. Suggestion: use 'borrowed' for taking bikes temporarily and 'went on cycling trips' for the activity.

× Well, I think bike is popular in some of the digits only.

✓ Well, I think bikes are popular in some districts only.

The original has singular 'bike' where a general plural 'bikes' is needed, and 'digits' is incorrect word choice likely intending 'districts'. Also use 'are' for plural subject. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to things in general ('bikes are') and check word choice for 'districts'.

× For example in the city area it is hardly for you to cycle, whereas in some in the countryside like in new in the new territory there have some.

✓ For example, in the city area it is difficult to cycle, whereas in some parts of the countryside, like the New Territories, there are some bikes.

Multiple issues: 'it is hardly for you to cycle' incorrectly uses 'hardly' and structure; 'hardly' is an adverb and does not fit 'for you to'. Use 'difficult to' for ability. 'in some in the countryside' has duplication; 'new in the new territory' is wrong capitalization and word order. 'there have some' is ungrammatical—use 'there are some' for existence (there be issue). Suggestion: use 'difficult to cycle' for general difficulty, remove duplicate words, use correct place names and 'there are' to indicate existence.