Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Work on clarity, grammar and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and nouns, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–4 sentences. For example, use past simple consistently (bought, was) and correct nouns (bike).

예시: Yes, I did. My dad bought me my first bike when I was twelve. At first I struggled to ride it, but after practising every day for a week I could ride confidently.

제안: Improve sentence structure and provide a clear reason with a linking phrase. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unnecessary repetition. Give a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words such as 'because', 'for example' or 'also'.

예시: Yes, I do. Bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people join local cycling communities. For example, there are regular weekend rides and charity cycling events that attract large groups.

× Yes I did I remember that my dad bought the buy for me or in my 12 birthday is my first buy and back then I'm was trying to drive so hard and finally I can drive it.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember that my dad bought the bike for me on my 12th birthday; it was my first bike, and back then I was trying very hard to ride it, and finally I could ride it.

Errors involve past tense consistency and word choice. Use past simple for completed actions (bought, was trying, could) rather than present or mixed forms (I'm was, can). 'Buy' is a noun error — the correct noun is 'bike'. Use 'on my 12th birthday' for time expressions. 'Try so hard' is better as 'try very hard' or 'was trying very hard'. Ensure punctuation and sentence boundaries: separate into sentences or use appropriate connectors. Suggestions: use past simple for past events, correct noun forms, and standard time preposition 'on' plus ordinal number '12th'.

× Yes, I do. I think by, uh, quite popular in my country because there are too many the bike community that too many people come to, uh, participate and.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bikes are quite popular in my country because there are many bike communities that many people come to participate in.

Problems include wrong prepositions and extra or missing articles. 'By' is incorrect here; use the noun 'bikes' as the subject. Use plural 'bike communities' without 'the' when speaking generally. The verb phrase 'come to participate' needs the preposition 'in' at the end: 'participate in'. Remove redundant words ('too many' repeated) and use 'many' for countable plural. Suggestions: choose correct subject and verb form, remove unnecessary articles, and place prepositions correctly at the end of the clause when required.