Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and relevant. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 concise supporting details that relate to biking (e.g., who gave it to you, when you learned to ride). Avoid confusing words (like "write") and grammar errors (tense and articles). Use linking words such as "when" or "so" to connect ideas. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, and my friends taught me how to ride in our neighborhood park. It took me about a week to feel confident cycling on my own, so I rode almost every day after that.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary. Begin with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific reasons and examples (e.g., commuting, cost, environment). Replace incorrect words ("write", "transformation") with correct ones ("ride", "transport" or "transportation"). Use linking words like "because", "for example", or "also" to make your points coherent. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and school. For example, cyclists are common in cities where traffic is heavy and public transport is expensive. Also, biking is affordable and better for the environment, so more people choose it as a practical option.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but actually I don't.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but actually I don't now.

The original mixes past and present tenses without a time adverb, causing confusion. Adding 'now' clarifies the contrast between past possession and present non-possession. Suggestion: include time markers when contrasting past and present (e.g., 'now', 'anymore').

× I didn't know how to write and my friends taught me how to write and it's took me one week to learn it.

✓ I didn't know how to ride, and my friends taught me; it took me one week to learn.

Multiple errors: wrong verb 'write' presumably should be 'ride' (lexical error) and 'it's took' is incorrect past tense formation. Use simple past 'it took' for completed action. Also combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use correct verb ('ride') and use past simple 'it took' for duration in the past.

× And my opinion, I think that, but it's really popular in my country because people used to write it to, uh, to works.

✓ In my opinion, it's really popular in my country because people used to ride it to work.

Problems: word order ('And my opinion' incorrect; use 'In my opinion'), wrong verb 'write' should be 'ride', incorrect preposition 'to works' should be 'to work' (work as an uncountable noun for the place of employment). 'Used to' plus base verb is correct for past habit. Suggestion: use 'In my opinion', 'ride', and 'to work' for correct preposition and noun form.

× Uh, I can say that they use it as a transformation.

✓ I can say that they use it for transportation.

The noun 'transformation' is incorrect; the intended word is 'transportation'. This is a wrong word choice (vocabulary) and makes the sentence semantically incorrect. Suggestion: use 'transportation' when referring to means of travel or conveyance.