Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, use a topic sentence and provide 1–2 specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (maximum 5 sentences). Also correct repetition and grammar. Use linking words if giving extra detail.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used it to ride to school and play with friends. Because it was lightweight and had training wheels at first, I learned to balance quickly and felt very confident.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitations and repetition, correct grammar (e.g., 'people whose goal is to be fit ride these bikes'), and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. For example, many people ride bicycles for exercise and commuting because they are affordable and help avoid traffic, and in my neighborhood I often see groups of cyclists training early in the morning.

× Here in the Philippines, I can say that bikes are quite popular, but I can see in my environment and in my community that people who are who whose goal is to be fit rides these bikes.

✓ Here in the Philippines, I can say that bikes are quite popular, but I can see in my environment and in my community that people whose goal is to be to be fit ride these bikes.

The original sentence misuses relative pronouns ('who are who whose') and has subject-verb disagreement ('people... rides'). Use the correct relative pronoun 'whose' to show possession ('people whose goal is to be fit'). Also, because the subject is the plural noun 'people', the verb should be the base plural form 'ride', not 'rides'. Suggestion: remove the extra words 'who are who', use 'people whose goal is to be fit', and match verb to plural subject: 'people... ride'.