Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct answer to the question with a clear topic sentence. Avoid greetings or filler; the examiner already greeted you. Briefly state yes or no and follow with one or two specific details about the bike (color, age received, who gave it) using linking words like “and” or “because.” Keep it natural and under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My father gave me a small red bike for my fifth birthday, and I used it to ride around the neighborhood every weekend.

제안: Respond directly to the question about popularity rather than recounting personal history. Start with a clear opinion (e.g., “Yes, bikes are popular”), then support it with two specific reasons or examples (e.g., health benefits, commuting, affordable transport) using linking words such as “because” or “for example.” Reduce hesitations and avoid irrelevant details. Keep to a maximum of five sentences and use varied, relevant vocabulary (e.g., commuting, recreational, environmentally friendly).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, in cities you can see cyclists commuting to work to avoid traffic, and in rural areas children often ride bikes for leisure.

× Yes, I had a bike uh uh during my child, It is a small bike uh that was gifted my my father uh on the occasion of my uh 5th birthday bike was a red in color uh and uh. I personally have uh M many memories etcetera.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small bike that my father gifted me on my 5th birthday. The bike was red, and I have many personal memories of it.

The original contains several preposition and sentence-structure errors. 'during my child' incorrectly uses the preposition 'during' and the noun 'child'; the correct phrase is 'when I was a child' (use a time clause with 'when' and the past continuous/was). 'was gifted my my father' misorders object and subject and omits the indirect object pronoun; use 'my father gifted me' or 'was gifted to me by my father'. 'on the occasion of my 5th birthday' is wordy but acceptable; simplified to 'on my 5th birthday'. 'bike was a red in color' has wrong word order and unnecessary words; correct to 'The bike was red'. 'I personally have uh M many memories etcetera' contains fillers and a typo; correct to 'I have many personal memories of it.' Suggestions: use correct prepositions for time (when/in/on), place indirect objects after the verb or use 'to' with passive, keep adjective order simple (color adjective before noun), and remove filler words and typos.