Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like “uh,” use past tense correctly, and limit to maximum five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was 12 years old, and I remember feeling very proud of it. For example, I rode it every afternoon with my friends around the neighborhood, which made those years much more enjoyable.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons and link them with connectors. Use correct verb forms and more precise vocabulary (e.g., “good for health,” “benefit the environment”). Limit to three sentences to stay natural and effective.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to stay healthy and keep fit. Moreover, cycling reduces air pollution, so it benefits the environment as well. For instance, city programs that promote cycling have increased the number of commuters on bikes.

× When I was a child, uh, I had a bike, my first bike I get when I was 12 years old and I was very happy in that moment.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. I got my first bike when I was 12 years old, and I was very happy at that moment.

The student mixed past simple 'had' with present 'get'; 'get' should be past 'got' to match the narrative in the past. Also run-on sentence structure was corrected into two sentences and the preposition 'in' before 'that moment' should be 'at'. Suggestion: use past simple consistently for past events and split long clauses into separate sentences for clarity.

× In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because it helps for health and keep fit.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because they help with health and keep people fit.

The singular pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes'; use 'they'. Also 'help for health' is unidiomatic — use 'help with health' or 'are good for health', and 'keep fit' needs a subject like 'people'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and use common collocations like 'help with' and 'keep people fit'.

× When people buy a ride a bike, they help for environment too.

✓ When people buy or ride a bike, they help the environment too.

The phrase 'buy a ride a bike' is incorrect; likely intended 'buy or ride a bike'. Also 'help for environment' is incorrect preposition and missing article; use 'help the environment' or 'help the environment too'. Suggestion: choose correct conjunction ('or') between verbs and use 'help the environment' as the standard phrase.