Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve naturalness and conciseness. Avoid redundancy ("bike cycle" and repeating "when I was a child"). Use a stronger topic sentence, add one specific detail with a linking word, and keep it within 2–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (say "on my 3rd birthday" and "around the neighbourhood").

예시: Yes — I had a bike as a child. My father gave me one on my third birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighbourhood, which helped me learn balance and made me very happy.

제안: The answer addresses the question but is somewhat repetitive and could be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add concrete reasons and an example using a linking word (e.g., "for example", "because"). Correct number agreement ("everyone can afford them") and avoid vague phrases like "everyone" without qualification. Expand slightly with one specific example of how bikes are used.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use them for short commutes and market trips, which saves money on transport and also provides regular exercise.

× My father gifted me a bike cycle for my 3rd birthday.

✓ My father gifted me a bicycle for my 3rd birthday.

'Bike cycle' is a redundant and incorrect noun combination. Use either 'bike' or 'bicycle'; 'bicycle' is more formal and appropriate here. Also 'gifted me' is acceptable; no article change needed.

× I used to ride it every afternoon around a neighborhood which made me very happy.

✓ I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood, which made me very happy.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'neighborhood' when referring to a specific area familiar to speaker and listener. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which made me very happy.'

× Everyone can afford it.

✓ Everyone can afford one.

'Everyone' is singular and refers to people in general; using 'it' is awkward. Use 'one' to refer back to 'a bike' in a general sense. Alternatively, 'Everyone can afford a bike.' is acceptable.

× It has both economical and health benefits.

✓ It has both economic and health benefits.

Use the adjective 'economic' (not 'economical') when referring to benefits related to the economy or cost; 'economical' means 'thrifty' or 'not wasteful.' Here 'economic benefits' is the correct collocation.