Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be concise, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Use correct tense (past) and natural phrasing. For example, say you received the bike as a birthday gift, where you rode it, and one memory to make the answer more vivid. Keep to a maximum of about 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as an early birthday present, and I remember practicing in the park every weekend until I learned to ride without training wheels.

제안: Provide a clearer topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and correct collocations (e.g., "cannot afford to buy"). Aim for 2–3 sentences with one clear reason and a brief supporting detail or example.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people cannot afford to buy a car or motorcycle. For example, students and commuters often use bikes for short trips and to save money on transport.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child because it was my advanced gift in my incoming birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because it was an early birthday gift.

The student mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' for past situations. 'Advanced gift' and 'incoming birthday' are unnatural; use 'early birthday gift' to convey receiving the gift before the birthday. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with the time frame and use natural collocations for gifts.

× My parents buy it in a supermarket.

✓ My parents bought it at a supermarket.

The action happened in the past, so the past form 'bought' is required instead of 'buy'. Use the preposition 'at' (or 'in' is possible but 'at a supermarket' is more natural) to indicate location. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past actions and pair with appropriate prepositions.

× Yes, it's uh, popular because some individual, family or person cannot afford buy a car or motorcycle so they can use a bike.

✓ Yes, it's popular because some individuals, families, or people cannot afford to buy a car or motorcycle, so they use a bike.

Pronoun and noun number must agree and be parallel: use plural forms 'individuals, families, or people' or a single category. Also 'cannot afford buy' is missing the infinitive marker 'to' — correct form is 'cannot afford to buy'. The second clause should use 'they use a bike' or 'they use bikes' for consistency. Suggestion: ensure parallel structure in lists, include 'to' after 'afford', and match singular/plural forms across the sentence.