Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), avoid irrelevant generalisations about gender, and give one or two specific reasons or a brief personal detail. Use correct past-tense forms and linkers for clarity.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one at the time, so I usually walked to school or took the bus. As a result, I only learned to ride a bike when I was a teenager.

제안: Answer directly, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid trailing off and complete your sentences. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. commuting, motorbikes, cyclists) and concise phrasing.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute because they are cheaper and faster in heavy traffic. In recent years more women have started riding as well, especially for short trips around town.

× No I didn't had a bike when I was a child as I was a girl child and girls are not too much interested when like in bikes when they are small.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was a girl and girls are not very interested in bikes when they are young.

Incorrect use of past tense after did: auxiliary 'did' requires base form 'have', not past 'had'. Also awkward phrasing: 'girl child' and 'not too much interested when like in bikes when they are small' are ungrammatical and wordy. Suggestions: use 'didn't have', replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity, use 'girl' or 'being a girl' and 'not very interested in bikes when they are young'. Use commas for pauses.

× So no I didn't have a bike.

✓ So no, I didn't have a bike.

Missing comma after introductory 'So no' affects readability. This is a minor sentence-structure/punctuation issue. Suggestion: add a comma to separate the discourse marker from the clause.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country as I see a lot of them on a daily basis when I'm stuck in a traffic or probably going somewhere by the roads.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because I see a lot of them on a daily basis when I'm stuck in traffic or when I'm travelling on the roads.

Awkward phrase 'in a traffic' is incorrect preposition/article use; 'stuck in traffic' is the correct idiom. 'Probably going somewhere by the roads' is ungrammatical; use 'when I'm travelling on the roads' or 'when I'm going somewhere by road'. Also 'as' can be replaced by 'because' for clearer cause. Maintain present tense 'I think' and 'I see'.

× And nowadays girls are also very much interested in the.

✓ And nowadays girls are also very much interested in them.

Sentence incomplete: ends with 'the.' which is incorrect. The pronoun reference should be 'them' referring to bikes. Also 'very much interested in' is acceptable but could be 'very interested in'. Suggestion: complete the sentence with the correct pronoun and consider simplifying to 'very interested in bikes'.