Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief consequence. Use linking words (e.g., so, because) correctly and avoid repeating words.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. As a result, it was inconvenient for me to get around, so I relied on walking or my parents driving me to school.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, actually), and provide a specific reason with a comparative detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and correct phrasing (e.g., 'train fares are cheap').

예시: Not really. In Japan, trains and taxis are more popular than bicycles because train fares are relatively cheap and the rail network is extensive, so many people prefer public transport for commuting.

× Actually, I didn't have any bikes when I was a child, so it's it was too inconvenient for me to move from one place to another.

✓ Actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, so it was too inconvenient for me to move from one place to another.

The original uses 'any bikes' which is plural while context implies a single possession; more natural is the singular 'a bike'. Also the sentence contains 'it's it was' — a duplication error; remove 'it's' to keep correct past tense 'it was'. Suggestion: use 'a bike' for singular and ensure only one verb phrase ('it was') matches past time frame.

× Not really actually. Uh, in my country Japan, trains or taxi are much more popular than bikes.

✓ Not really, actually. Uh, in my country, Japan, trains or taxis are much more popular than bikes.

'Taxi' is singular but paired with 'trains' (plural); to be parallel and correct, use the plural 'taxis'. Also add commas around 'Japan' as a parenthetical. Ensure plural nouns agree when listed.

× This is because the transportation fee that trains takes are very cheap.

✓ This is because train fares are very cheap.

The original has several issues: 'the transportation fee that trains takes are' mixes singular/plural and wrong verb agreement. Use 'train fares' (plural) with plural verb 'are'. Also 'cheap' is acceptable but 'very cheap' is idiomatic; combine into concise noun phrase. Suggestion: simplify to 'train fares are very cheap' to fix article, noun number, and subject-verb agreement errors.