Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus supporting details. Avoid unclear words (e.g., “Rep I”) and run-on sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a specific detail (where/when/how).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle and learned to ride it in the local park with my older brothers. We practised every weekend, and afterward we would cycle to nearby shops to buy snacks.

제안: Answer the actual question directly (about popularity), then support with specific reasons or examples. Fix tense and subject-verb agreement errors and avoid mixing personal history with the general opinion unless clearly linked. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to explain why bikes are popular.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, when I was a child my family often rode to school and to Erhai Park on weekends, so cycling is common and convenient.

× Well yes, I had a small Rep I when I was a child I learned to ride it in the park with my elder brothers and I used to be friends and go to the shops almost every weekend.

✓ Well, yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it in the park with my elder brothers, and we used to go to the shops almost every weekend.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and incorrect wording. The original mixes clauses without proper punctuation, making it a sentence structure error and hindering tense clarity. 'Rep I' appears to be a typo or wrong noun; replaced with 'bike' to match context. 'I used to be friends and go to the shops' is incorrect because 'be friends' is not appropriate for siblings; changed to 'we used to go to the shops' to reflect habitual past activity. Use commas and a period to separate ideas and keep consistent past tense ('had', 'learned', 'used to'). Suggestion: Use punctuation to separate independent clauses, ensure nouns are correct, and keep verbs in consistent past tense for past routines.

× Yes I did. I have a white bike when I was a child and I learned to ride it with my father.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a white bike when I was a child, and I learned to ride it with my father.

Tense inconsistency: 'I have a white bike when I was a child' mixes present tense 'have' with past time expression 'when I was a child'. Change 'have' to past 'had' to match the past context. Keep commas for clarity. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame; use past tense for past events.

× We used to ride to the school every day and I love to circling around the Erhai park, especially on weekends.

✓ We used to ride to school every day, and I loved circling around Erhai Park, especially on weekends.

Mixed tense and verb form errors: 'used to' correctly indicates past habitual action, so the second clause should also be in the past ('loved') to maintain consistency. 'I love to circling' is ungrammatical — 'love to' requires base verb ('love to circle') or use gerund with 'love' ('loved circling'). Choose 'loved circling' to match past. Also 'ride to the school' is unnatural; use 'ride to school'. Capitalize proper noun 'Erhai Park'. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent across coordinated clauses and use appropriate verb forms after verbs like 'love'.