Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, pronoun use and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronouns and verb forms, and keep answers concise (max 3–4 sentences). Add one specific detail and a linking word to make it coherent. For example, replace "she did have" with "I had"; combine short fragments into smooth sentences and include when or where you rode the bike.

예시: I had a bike when I was a child; my mother bought it for me as a birthday gift. I often rode it around my neighborhood with friends, especially in the evenings after school. Those rides were exciting because we explored different streets and raced each other along the river path.

제안: Work on clarity and vocabulary choice. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "for example", "in particular"). Avoid incorrect phrases like "great polarity"; use "very popular" or "widespread". Use correct plural forms and consistent terms: "road bicycles" and "mountain bikes".

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for commuting in cities, and there is a wide variety available, such as road bikes for speed and mountain bikes for rough terrain. In particular, bike-sharing schemes in large cities have made cycling more common.

× Yeah, she did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I did have a bike when I was a child.

The speaker refers to themselves, so the subject pronoun should be 'I' not 'she'. Using 'she' creates a mismatch between speaker and subject. Use 'I' for first-person statements. Suggestion: Replace third-person pronoun with the correct first-person pronoun 'I'.

× My mother bought it, had a gift for me.

✓ My mother bought it as a gift for me.

The original is a comma splice and lacks the correct connector or preposition. 'Had a gift for me' is ungrammatical in this context. Use 'as a gift' to show purpose and combine into one coherent sentence. Suggestion: Use a prepositional phrase 'as a gift' or rewrite: 'My mother bought it for me as a gift.'

× I usually rode the bike around the city with my friends.

✓ I usually rode the bike around the city with my friends when I was a child.

The rest of the context is past (childhood), so 'usually rode' is acceptable but adding the time frame clarifies tense consistency. Without the time phrase it may seem odd to use 'usually' with past simple alone. Suggestion: Keep past simple 'rode' and include 'when I was a child' or use 'would ride' for habitual past: 'I would ride the bike...'.

× It was really exciting time.

✓ It was a really exciting time.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'really exciting time'. English requires an article before the singular count noun 'time' in this context. Also 'really' correctly modifies 'exciting'. Suggestion: Insert 'a' to form 'a really exciting time'.

× Yes, I think other bikes are of great polarity.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are very popular.

'Polarity' is the wrong word; likely intended 'popularity' or 'popular'. The phrase 'other bikes are of great polarity' is ungrammatical. Use 'bicycles are very popular' or 'bikes are very popular'. Suggestion: Replace incorrect noun with 'popular' or 'popular in my country'.

× In our country.

✓ In our country,

This fragment lacks a main clause and should be attached to the following sentence. As written it's a sentence fragment. It should be connected with the next sentence using a comma or combined into one sentence. Suggestion: Combine into 'In our country, we have a huge number of bikes...'.

× We have a huge amount of bikes and a great variety of bikes like the road bicycles, mountain bicycle.

✓ We have a huge number of bikes and a great variety, like road bicycles and mountain bicycles.

'Amount' is used with uncountable nouns; for countable plural 'number' is correct. Also 'bicycles' should be plural for both types, and 'the' is unnecessary. The list should use parallel plural forms and correct conjunctions. Suggestion: Use 'a huge number of bikes' and parallel nouns: 'road bicycles and mountain bicycles.'