Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and logically structured. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “my father bought it for me,” “I learned to ride”). Avoid redundancy and unnecessary phrases.

예시: Yes. My father bought me a bicycle when I was seven, and I learned to ride it in our neighborhood park. Since then I’ve loved cycling; every month I would go out with my dad for a ride, which became our special way to spend time together.

제안: Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., “are popular,” “my country now has a public bike-sharing system”). Avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and commuting. For example, my city now has a public bike-sharing system, so if you don’t own a bicycle you can easily rent one from stations located throughout the streets.

× I have a bike, my father bought it to me and I learned how to ride a bike.

✓ I had a bike; my father bought it for me and I learned how to ride it.

The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used consistently. 'I have' is present; change to 'I had'. 'Bought it to me' is incorrect preposition use; correct is 'bought it for me'. Repetition 'ride a bike' can be shortened to 'ride it'. Suggestion: use past simple for completed actions in the past and use 'for' with 'buy' when indicating recipient.

× And finally I love this kind of sports because every month I will hang out with my dad and wait to just ride together.

✓ I really like this kind of sport because every month I hang out with my dad and we just ride together.

Mixes tenses and has word choice errors. 'Finally' is not appropriate; use 'I really like'. 'This kind of sports' has number agreement and should be 'this kind of sport' (uncountable). 'Every month I will hang out' uses future 'will' incorrectly for habitual action — use present simple 'I hang out'. 'Wait to just ride together' is ungrammatical; 'we just ride together' or 'we go riding together' is correct. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct noun number.

× Yes, I will buy these really popular in my country because almost everyone has their own bike and now our my country uh generates the commu communal bike for the whole society.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because almost everyone has their own bike, and now my country has introduced communal bikes for the whole society.

The student used 'I will buy' incorrectly; the question asks about whether bikes are popular, so present simple 'bikes are really popular' fits. 'I will buy these' is irrelevant and wrong tense. 'Our my country' is redundant; use 'my country'. 'Generates the commu communal bike' is incorrect verb and duplicated fragment; use 'has introduced communal bikes' or 'provides communal bikes'. Suggestion: use present simple to describe general facts and choose correct verbs like 'introduce' or 'provide'.

× Everyone. If you don't have your own bike, you can search for one bike when you're on the road.

✓ If you don't have your own bike, you can look for a shared bike when you're on the street.

Fragment 'Everyone.' is unnecessary and should be integrated or removed. 'Search for one bike' is awkward; native speakers say 'look for a shared bike' or 'find a bike'. 'On the road' is acceptable but 'on the street' or 'nearby' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and choose natural collocations like 'look for' and 'shared bike'.