Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer communicates the idea but is slightly disfluent and contains repetition and minor grammar errors. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child.”). 2) Remove repetitions and fix tense/word order issues (e.g. “we took turns” not “we took turn”). 3) Use one or two supporting details with a linking word (e.g. “because,” “so,” or “however”) and keep the response to no more than 4–5 concise sentences. 4) Vary vocabulary slightly (e.g. “shared with my two older sisters” instead of “2 elder sisters”).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike of my own as a child. My family had one bicycle, but I had to share it with my two older sisters, so we took turns riding it. As a result, I only used the bike on weekends when it was my turn.

제안: Your answer is clear but contains hesitations, minor grammar mistakes, and could use a bit more specific detail. To improve: 1) Give a direct topic sentence (e.g. “No, bikes aren’t very popular in Hong Kong.”). 2) Correct grammar: “use bikes as a means of travel” or “use bikes for travelling,” and “public transportation such as the MTR (metro).” 3) Add a specific reason or example with a linking word (e.g. “because” or “for example”) to make the reply more informative. 4) Avoid filler hesitations like “uh.”

예시: No, bikes aren’t very popular in Hong Kong. People usually walk or rely on public transport such as the MTR and buses because the city is very crowded and well connected. For example, many streets are busy and there are limited bike lanes, so cycling is not a common way to commute.

× My family owned a bike but I have but I had to share it with my 2 elder sisters so I didn't have a bike of my own and we took turn to ride the bike during weekends.

✓ My family owned a bike, but I had to share it with my two elder sisters, so I didn't have a bike of my own, and we took turns riding it on weekends.

This sentence has several structure problems (ID 26). It contains a redundant phrase ('I have but I had'), inconsistent number format ('2' should be 'two' in formal writing), missing plural on 'turn' ('turns'), and awkward verb forms. Also use 'riding it' rather than 'to ride the bike' for smooth coordination. Suggestion: remove the redundant words, use consistent number formatting, pluralize countable nouns when needed, and use parallel verb forms: 'took turns riding it on weekends.'

× We took turn to ride the bike during weekends.

✓ We took turns riding the bike on weekends.

This clause shows incorrect preposition and noun form (ID 11). Use 'on weekends' (not 'during weekends') and plural 'turns' after 'took'. Also use the -ing form 'riding' to follow 'took turns.' Suggestion: say 'took turns riding the bike on weekends.'

× I don't think so. Uh, in Hong Kong we don't really use bike as a travelling tools.

✓ I don't think so. Uh, in Hong Kong we don't really use bikes as a means of travel.

This sentence has problems with number and noun choice (ID 6 and 1). 'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general present-tense statements about people, and 'travelling tools' is unnatural and uncountable; use 'a means of travel' or 'for travel.' Suggestion: use plural for general statements and choose idiomatic expressions: 'bikes as a means of travel.'

× We often walk or take public transportation like the uh, railway.

✓ We often walk or take public transportation, like the railway.

The issue is article and phrasing (ID 17). 'The uh, railway' has filler 'uh' and punctuation; more natural is 'like the railway' if referring to a specific rail system, or 'like the MTR'/'like trains' for general reference. Suggestion: remove filler words and use the appropriate article or a plural noun: 'like trains' or 'like the railway.'