Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence about whether you had a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details (age, why you wanted it, who bought it or not). Use correct past tense and avoid filler words. Keep responses to 3–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so, but) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I wanted a bicycle when I was a child, but I didn't have one. I asked my parents for it many times because I loved riding in the park and saw other children riding theirs. However, they felt it was expensive, so I learned to enjoy walking and playing other outdoor games instead.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons and examples. Begin with a clear opinion about popularity in your country, then add 2–3 supporting points using linking words (for example, because, for instance, therefore). Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., affordable, convenient, common) and avoid unclear phrases like “worrying it is.”

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For instance, many students and workers use bikes to commute to school or local markets. As a result, you can see dedicated bike lanes and plenty of bike parking in cities.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense; 'did' is the correct short affirmative response for a past-tense yes/no question. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation.

× When I was SHIELD.

✓ When I was a child.

'SHIELD' is not a noun appropriate to this context; likely the student meant 'child'. The original fragment lacks clear meaning. Replacing with 'When I was a child' produces a complete time clause appropriate to the question.

× Umm it is my it is.

✓ Umm, it was mine.

The student attempts to express possession in the past. 'It is my it is' is ungrammatical and repetitive. Use 'it was mine' to indicate past possession; include a comma after the filler 'Umm'.

× It was my dream.

✓ It was my dream.

This sentence is already correct in tense and structure. It refers to a past desire, so no change is needed.

× I really wanted it but my my parents didn't buy it.

✓ I really wanted it, but my parents didn't buy it.

The sentence correctly uses past tense verbs ('wanted', 'didn't buy') so no tense change is needed. Corrections: remove the repeated word 'my', and add a comma before 'but' to separate clauses. This improves clarity.

× Yes, bikes are popular in the world.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular worldwide.

The original is understandable but slightly awkward. Replace 'in the world' with 'worldwide' for natural phrasing. The present simple 'are' is appropriate for a general statement.

× It is not just my country.

✓ They're not just popular in my country.

Reference is unclear: 'It' should refer to 'bikes' (plural). Use a plural pronoun or repeat the noun. The correction uses 'They're' to match plural 'bikes' and clarifies meaning by adding 'popular'.

× Bike is not expensive and worrying it is I like it.

✓ Bikes are not expensive, and I like them.

Multiple errors: 'Bike' should be plural 'Bikes' for a general statement; 'is not expensive' becomes 'are not expensive'. The phrase 'worrying it is' is ungrammatical and likely intended to express a personal feeling; replace with 'and I like them' to state preference. Use 'them' as the plural object pronoun to refer to 'bikes'. Add a comma to separate clauses.