Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently and form clear simple sentences. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and include a topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words for clarity (for example, “and” or “because”). Corrected details: say who bought it, where, and why it was special. Pronunciation fillers (uh, umm) should be minimized.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a blue bicycle from a shopping mall as a birthday gift when I was eight. I remember riding it to the park every weekend, and it helped me learn independence and confidence.

제안: Make your answer more fluent and specific: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concrete reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar and plural/singular agreement (e.g., “bicycles are popular” and “during the pandemic”). Avoid filler words and repeat ideas once. Provide an example or result to support your point.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. They are cheap and convenient for short trips, and during the pandemic many people — including healthcare workers and delivery riders — preferred them because they avoided crowded public transport. As a result, some cities saw an increase in bike lanes to accommodate more cyclists.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and my parents buy me in a mall when my income the uh, this is a gift for me when my birthday is coming.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and my parents bought it for me at a mall as a birthday gift.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses. Use past tense to describe past events: 'have' -> 'had', 'buy' -> 'bought'. Also correct pronouns and prepositions: 'a bike' referenced later should be 'it', 'buy me in a mall' -> 'bought it for me at a mall'. Remove unclear phrase 'when my income the uh' because it is ungrammatical; replace with 'as a birthday gift' to match 'when my birthday is coming'. Use consistent simple past to describe past facts. Suggestions: Keep tense consistent (simple past) for past events, use correct object pronouns and prepositions, and remove filler or unclear fragments.

× Yes, it's a popular because it is convenient, convenient to use it, especially umm, when a pandemics when a pandemic, umm, the health workers is use it because.

✓ Yes, it's popular because it is convenient to use, especially during a pandemic, and health workers use it a lot.

Errors: 'it's a popular' incorrectly uses 'a' with the adjective 'popular' — use 'popular' without 'a' or use a noun phrase like 'a popular choice'. 'to use it' is redundant after 'convenient'; instead say 'convenient to use'. 'when a pandemics when a pandemic' is ungrammatical and plural/singular mismatch; use 'during a pandemic'. 'the health workers is use it' has subject-verb agreement and word order issues: 'health workers use it' is correct (plural subject with base verb). Suggestions: Remove unnecessary articles before adjectives, avoid repetition, use 'during' for periods like pandemics, and ensure subject-verb agreement for third-person plural subjects.