Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise, avoid irrelevant or self-limiting comments, correct small grammar and pronunciation issues, and use one clear topic sentence plus a brief reason or example. For instance, remove ‘as I'm a girl’ (unnecessary stereotype) and fix 'A1 bike' to 'a bike'. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' once to connect ideas.

예시: I didn't have a bike as a child because I preferred indoor toys like dolls. Therefore, I never learned to ride, although I sometimes tried my friends' bicycles during outings.

제안: Good direct answer with supporting details. Improve by reducing repetition, using varied vocabulary, and adding a brief example or comparison to strengthen the point. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'in particular') and correct the doubled 'and'.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes in cities, and they are common in small towns where traffic is lighter and parking is limited.

× When I was a child I didn't have a bike because I wasn't very interested in biking or riding a bicycle.

✓ When I was a child I didn't have a bike because I wasn't very interested in biking or in riding a bicycle.

The original sentence is understandable but sounds slightly awkward because two gerund phrases are listed without parallel preposition use. Adding 'in' before 'riding a bicycle' makes the structure parallel and more natural: 'interested in biking or in riding a bicycle.' Maintain the past tense 'wasn't' to match 'When I was a child.' Suggestion: keep parallel prepositions when listing activities with 'interested in.'

× I was more interested in playing with dolls as I'm a girl.

✓ I was more interested in playing with dolls because I was a girl.

The original mixes past tense 'I was' with present tense contraction 'I'm,' causing a tense inconsistency and odd register. Use 'because I was a girl' to keep tense consistent and more formal. Also 'as' can mean 'because' but here 'because' is clearer. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent within the sentence.

× So. So I never owned A1 bike.

✓ So I never owned a bike.

The original has fragmented repetition 'So. So' and includes 'A1' which appears to be a typo. Remove the extra 'So' and the 'A1' to produce a grammatically correct, fluent sentence: 'So I never owned a bike.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and typos; check for accidental tokens like 'A1.'

× You can see both boys and girls riding them everywhere, especially in cities and smaller town areas.

✓ You can see both boys and girls riding them everywhere, especially in cities and smaller towns.

The phrase 'smaller town areas' is awkward and unidiomatic. Use the plural noun 'towns' with the adjective 'smaller' to match 'cities.' Also 'areas' is redundant. Suggestion: use parallel noun forms when listing places (cities and smaller towns).

× I think their popularity has grown because they are cheap, convenient and and really good exercise.

✓ I think their popularity has grown because they are cheap, convenient, and really good exercise.

The original contains a duplicated 'and and' (typo) and lacks a comma before the final list item (Oxford comma is optional but improves clarity here). The phrase 'really good exercise' is acceptable; keep it. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and maintain consistent punctuation in lists.