Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and correct tense/agreement errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition ("when I was a child" repeated) and fix verb forms (use past tense consistently).

예시: Yes, I did. I enjoyed having a bike as a child because it gave me freedom to explore my neighborhood. For example, I often rode to the park with friends, which felt relaxing and fun.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Remove filler words like "umm," avoid repeating phrases ("in my country"), and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "motorcycles," "private cars"). Consider adding a brief comparison or example to strengthen the response.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Mainly people prefer motorcycles because they are faster in traffic, and many use private cars for safety and comfort in the city. For instance, commuting by motorcycle is common for short trips while families usually travel by car.

× Yes I did and I really enjoy the time when I had a bike when I was a child because it was very relaxing and I can bike anywhere I want.

✓ Yes, I did, and I really enjoyed the time when I had a bike as a child because it was very relaxing and I could bike anywhere I wanted.

Mixed tenses and modal use: The student begins in past ('I did', 'when I was a child') so verbs describing that period should be in the past (enjoyed, could, wanted). Using present tense 'enjoy' and modal 'can' creates a time inconsistency. Change to past simple to match the time frame: 'enjoyed', 'could', 'wanted'. Also add commas for clarity.

× I don't believe so because bikes are very rare in my country.

✓ I don't think so because bikes are quite rare in my country.

Word choice and register: 'don't believe so' is acceptable but 'don't think so' is more natural in this context. No tense error, but 'very rare' is acceptable; 'quite rare' sounds more natural. This suggestion maintains present tense appropriate for general statements.

× People in my country tend to go by motorcycle which is more convenient and faster, and umm, they tend to go by cars because it is safe and very convenient in the city.

✓ People in my country tend to ride motorcycles, which are more convenient and faster, and they also tend to use cars because they are safe and very convenient in the city.

Multiple issues: verb choice and subject-verb agreement. Use 'ride motorcycles' or 'use motorcycles' rather than 'go by motorcycle'. 'Which are' must agree with plural 'motorcycles'. Similarly, 'cars' is plural so refer to them with 'they are' not 'it is'. Also avoid repetition 'tend to' twice; 'also' makes sentence smoother. Replace informal filler 'umm'.