Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (past tense), then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct verb tenses, pronouns and word order, and avoid unnecessary fragments. For example, mention how many bikes you had, a distinctive detail, and who gave them to you with a short phrase about the memory.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I owned two small bikes decorated with Disney Princesses, and my father bought one of them while he was working in Tacloban. I remember being very excited when he brought it home.

제안: Answer directly and expand with a brief reason and a comparison or example. Use correct noun forms and linking words for clarity (e.g., 'back then' or 'now'). Give a specific reason why bikes were considered a luxury and, if possible, contrast past and present.

예시: Yes, bikes used to be considered a luxury in my country because few families could afford them. However, nowadays more people own bicycles due to lower prices and increased interest in cycling for transport and exercise.

× I have a bike when I was a kid I have like 2 bikes with a thin Disney princesses. My father bought me that bike when he was working in Tacloban and when he got home he was already. I forgot.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid. I had about two bikes with thin Disney princess designs. My father bought me that bike when he was working in Tacloban, and when he got home it was already... I forgot.

The student mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a kid', which is inconsistent. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Also split run-on sentence into clearer sentences and correct noun phrase 'Disney princesses' to 'Disney princess designs' for clarity. The clause 'when he got home he was already. I forgot.' is incomplete; I preserved the intended pause with ellipsis and clarified tense agreement. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with the time reference and break long run-on sentences into shorter ones.

× I have like 2 bikes with a thin Disney princesses.

✓ I had about two bikes with thin Disney Princess designs.

The phrase mixes singular/plural and article use: 'a thin Disney princesses' is incorrect because 'a' indicates singular while 'princesses' is plural (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also 'thin' likely describes the design or decal, so reword to 'thin Disney Princess designs'. Use 'about two' instead of 'like 2' for more natural speech. Suggestion: match singular/plural and use consistent noun forms.

× My father bought me that bike when he was working in Tacloban and when he got home he was already. I forgot.

✓ My father bought me that bike when he was working in Tacloban, and when he got home it was already late; I forgot the rest.

The original contains an incomplete clause 'he was already.' which lacks an object or complement and makes the sentence unclear (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Clarify by adding the expected complement ('it was already late') or finish the idea, and use punctuation to separate 'I forgot' as an independent comment. Suggestion: complete clauses with necessary complements and use punctuation to indicate pauses or trailing thoughts.

× Yes, back then Bika is a luxury for us.

✓ Yes, back then a bike was a luxury for us.

'Bika' seems to be a misspelling of 'bike' and 'is' does not agree with the past time reference 'back then'—use past tense 'was' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Also include the article 'a' to form 'a bike' (article error combined). Suggestion: ensure verbs match the time frame and use correct articles for countable nouns.