Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (possessive and article use), and avoid redundancy. Add one short supporting detail using a linking word. For example, correct “my neighbors bicycle” to “my neighbour’s bicycle” (or “my neighbor’s bike”) and remove “for me to ride.”

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. Instead, I often borrowed my neighbor’s bike, so I still learned to ride and enjoyed cycling around the neighborhood on weekends.

제안: Improve coherence and grammar, and combine short sentences with linking words. Fix repetition and capitalize platform names correctly. Provide one specific example or reason to support your view. Keep it within four sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, there are large cycling groups and events, and you can see many posts and promotional pages on Facebook and TikTok that encourage group rides and bike maintenance.

× I used to borrow my neighbors bicycle for me to ride.

✓ I used to borrow my neighbor's bicycle to ride.

The sentence has two errors: missing possessive apostrophe and an unnecessary prepositional phrase. Use the possessive form neighbor's to show ownership. Also, saying 'for me to ride' is wordy and unnatural; use the infinitive 'to ride' instead.

× I used to borrow my neighbors bicycle for me to ride.

✓ I used to borrow my neighbor's bicycle to ride.

In addition to the possessive error, the noun 'bicycle' is countable and when specified by a possessive, no extra article is needed. The correction uses the possessive form and removes redundant words for natural phrasing.

× The bicycle community is big. It can The popularity can be seen through social media platforms like Facebook, Tiktok, and there are lots of individuals that promote the community itself.

✓ The bicycle community is large. Its popularity can be seen through social media platforms like Facebook and TikTok, and many individuals promote the community.

The original contains a fragmented phrase 'It can The popularity' and awkward repetition. 'Big' is informal; 'large' or 'strong' fits better. Use the possessive pronoun 'Its' to link popularity to the community. Combine clauses and remove redundant words ('the community itself'). Also correct capitalization of TikTok and use 'many' instead of 'lots of' for more formal accuracy.

× There are lots of individuals that promote the community itself.

✓ There are many individuals who promote the community.

'Lots of' is informal; 'many' is preferred. Use 'who' for people instead of 'that.' Removing 'itself' avoids redundancy. The subject-verb agreement 'There are' is correct, but the relative pronoun should be 'who' when referring to people.