Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but you can improve by giving a concise topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details and linking words. Avoid minor grammar slips (e.g., use "in ninth grade" or "when I was in class nine") and prefer a consistent tense. Keep it within 2–4 sentences to sound natural and focused.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, when I was in ninth grade I bought a bicycle so I could travel to school more quickly and exercise at the same time.

제안: Your answer addresses popularity but is repetitive and has grammatical and coherence issues. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or examples, using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "however"). Avoid repetition and correct subject–verb agreement ("they go" instead of "they are they go"). Also be careful with generalizations—phrase them cautiously.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially among students, because they are an affordable and convenient way to get to school. For example, many boys ride bikes to college to save time and money, whereas fewer girls do so due to safety concerns and cultural reasons.

× Yeah, it's very popular for the students because they are they go to school, college riding the bikes.

✓ Yeah, it's very popular among students because they go to school or college riding bikes.

The original has a subject-verb redundancy and incorrect pronoun use ('they are they go'). Also 'it's very popular for the students' is unnatural; use 'popular among students'. 'Riding the bikes' is wordy — use 'riding bikes'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'they go' is correct for plural 'students'. Suggestion: remove redundant words, use 'among' for groups, and keep plural noun without 'the' when speaking generally.

× So yeah, it's very popular for boys, mainly because I didn't see much girls going to schools or college riding a bike.

✓ So yeah, it's very popular among boys, mainly because I didn't see many girls going to school or college riding bikes.

Errors: 'for boys' -> 'among boys' is more natural; 'much girls' is incorrect — 'many girls' is required for countable noun 'girls'; 'going to schools' should be singular 'going to school' when speaking generally; 'riding a bike' is inconsistent—use 'riding bikes' for general reference. Also maintain parallel structure: 'going to school or college' and 'riding bikes'. Suggestion: use 'many' with countable nouns, use 'among' for groups, and keep nouns in general statements singular where appropriate (school) or plural consistently (bikes).