Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response direct, coherent and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and unclear phrases. Mention when you got the bike, what it looked like, and a brief memory or reason.

예시: Yes, I did. I received a bright red bicycle with training wheels for my fifth birthday, and I remember practicing every afternoon in our driveway. Because it had training wheels, I felt safe learning to balance, and by the time I was seven I could ride it without help.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical opinion followed by specific reasons and one example. Use linking words (for example, because, although) to organize ideas. Avoid vague fragments and unclear phrases. Mention prevalence, typical users, and any infrastructure or trends that explain popularity.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work or school, especially in cities. For example, there are dedicated bike lanes and public bike-sharing schemes that make cycling convenient and safe, so more commuters choose bikes over cars.

× It is more red bicycle weather training wheels.

✓ It was a red bicycle with training wheels.

The context is past (when the student was a child), so present 'is' is incorrect; use past 'was'. The original word order is wrong and missing preposition 'with' to link 'training wheels' to 'bicycle'. Use 'a red bicycle with training wheels' to be grammatically correct and clear. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for past events and include necessary prepositions to connect noun phrases.

× Umm that might put me on my 5th birthday.

✓ I think I got it for my fifth birthday.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Might put me on' is incorrect in this context. To express receiving a bike at a certain age, use a past simple verb 'got' and a clear subject 'I'. Also write numbers in words for small numbers: 'fifth'. Suggestion: Use a clear past-tense verb and subject to state when something happened.

× Umm I normal I needed.

✓ Normally I needed training wheels.

This fragment lacks clarity and a proper verb-object structure. 'I normal I needed' is ungrammatical. To describe a habitual past situation use 'Normally' and past tense 'needed' plus the object 'training wheels'. Suggestion: Begin with an adverb 'Normally' and follow with subject + past verb + object.

× bicycles are probably my country because so many people use them to commute to work or school.

✓ Bicycles are probably popular in my country because so many people use them to commute to work or school.

The phrase 'are probably my country' is missing the adjective describing bicycles in the country; 'my country' needs a linking adjective such as 'popular'. The sentence requires a predicate adjective 'popular' after 'are'. Suggestion: Use the correct adjective after 'are' to describe the noun and keep the explanation clause 'because...' unchanged.

× Well, developed by Lens.

✓ Well, the city has developed bike lanes.

'Developed by Lens' is ungrammatical and unclear. The speaker likely means 'bike lanes have been developed' or 'the city has developed bike lanes'. Choose an active construction 'the city has developed bike lanes' to be clear. Also 'Lens' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'lanes'. Suggestion: Use clear nouns ('bike lanes') and a verb phrase expressing development in present perfect for recent changes ('has developed').

× Uh, make cycling safer.

✓ This helps make cycling safer.

As a standalone fragment, 'make cycling safer' lacks a subject. To connect it to the previous sentence, use 'This helps make cycling safer' to indicate that developing bike lanes contributes to safety. It also clarifies tense and subject. Suggestion: Join fragments with a subject and appropriate verb to form a complete sentence.