Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tenses, avoid repetition, and follow basic structure: a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct errors: use past tense for childhood (e.g., "I had a bike"), reduce repeated phrases ("when I was a child" repeated), and use a linking word (e.g., "and" or "so") correctly. Keep to 2–4 sentences and provide a specific detail (who taught you, how old you were, where you rode).

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. My parents taught me to ride it when I was about six, and we used to practice in the park near our house. As a result, I still enjoy cycling now because it feels relaxing and good exercise.

제안: Make a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Use correct verbs and collocations (e.g., "bikes are popular", "play a big role"). Avoid filler words and unclear pronouns. Give concrete examples (frequency, locations, events) and one brief reason or result. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Indonesia, especially in Jakarta. For example, every Sunday there is a car-free day when many people cycle in the city center, and cycling is also common for short commutes and exercise. This event has helped promote cycling as a healthy and practical activity.

× I do have a bike when I was a child and I tried to learn how to ride a bike or a bicycle when I was children with my dad and my mom when I was children.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, and I tried to learn how to ride it with my dad and my mom.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past time marker 'when I was a child'; use simple past 'had'. 'When I was children' is incorrect because 'was' requires singular 'child' for the speaker; replace with 'when I was a child'. Also avoid repeating phrases and use 'it' to refer back to the bike for clarity. Suggestion: consistently use past tense for past events and avoid redundant repetition.

× So until now I do love to ride a bike.

✓ So until now I have loved riding a bike.

The phrase 'until now' indicates an action starting in the past and continuing to the present, which requires present perfect tense ('have loved'), not simple present with 'do'. Also use the gerund 'riding' after 'love' when referring to the activity. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions that began in the past and continue to the present and use gerund for activities.

× Yes, but I do popular in my country and Indonesia, especially in Jakarta because actually, uh, we have a car free day every Sunday morning and bicycle or bike do have a lot of role at that time because everyone is using that for that kind of car free day or exercise.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially in Jakarta, because we have a car-free day every Sunday morning and bicycles play an important role then since many people use them for that event and for exercise.

The original sentence has incorrect subject-verb relationships and awkward phrasing. 'I do popular' is ungrammatical; the subject should be 'bikes' with 'are popular' (present simple). 'Bicycle or bike do have a lot of role' is wrong: use 'bicycles play an important role' (plural subject with present simple verb 'play' and correct noun phrase 'an important role'). Remove filler words and redundant phrases. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree, use appropriate nouns as subjects (bikes, bicycles) and concise phrases ('play an important role', 'use them').