Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be concise, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then briefly explain why it was special and give a specific memory. Avoid redundancies and keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I received a small red bicycle as a present when I was about five years old, and I loved it because it let me ride to the park near my home. For example, I remember practising balancing every afternoon with my father’s help, which made me feel proud and independent.

제안: Use correct grammar, choose plural forms where needed, and add specific reasons with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide two concise, specific reasons (e.g., cost, traffic, culture) connected with linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

예시: Yes, definitely. Bicycles are very popular in China because they are affordable and convenient for short commutes. For example, many people use shared bikes or ride to work to avoid traffic and save money, especially in crowded cities.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was about 5 years old that was a present.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was about 5 years old; it was a present.

The student mixes present perfect 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was about 5 years old.' Use the simple past 'had' to match the past time reference. Also combine clauses for clarity.

× My parents gave it to me and I really like this bicycle because it makes me get a lot of chance play with my.

✓ My parents gave it to me and I really liked that bicycle because it gave me a lot of chances to play.

The sentence contains inconsistent tenses and incorrect verb forms. 'Gave' correctly is past; follow with past 'liked' and 'gave' to maintain past narrative. 'A lot of chance play with my' is ungrammatical: use 'a lot of chances to play.' Also 'my' should be removed. Use 'that bicycle' to refer back.

× Oh definitely. Bike is very popular in China because in China there are many people, they don't have a car, so most of the people had have to rely back to go to work.

✓ Oh, definitely. Bicycles are very popular in China because there are many people who don't have cars, so most people have to rely on them to go to work.

Multiple issues: 'Bike is' should be plural 'Bicycles are' to talk generally (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement), so ID could also be 1/27 but primary is article/number and agreement—here corrected to plural. 'They don't have a car' is generalized—use 'people who don't have cars.' 'Had have' is incorrect; use present tense 'have to' to express habitual action. 'Rely back' is wrong preposition; correct is 'rely on them.' Also remove redundant 'in China' repetition and 'the' before 'people.'