Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use past tense consistently), avoid repetition, and keep responses concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words (for example, 'however' or 'so') and give one or two specific supporting details (e.g. how you used the bike or a memory). Pronunciation/word choice issues: use 'bike' or 'bicycle' and 'rode' instead of 'wrote'; say 'it made me feel more independent' and 'improved my balance.'

예시: I didn't have a bike as a very young child, but my father gave me a bicycle for my seventh birthday. After that I rode it every day to the park and around my neighborhood, which helped me feel more independent. Riding also improved my balance and made it easier for me to join friends on longer rides.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, then support it with organized reasons and one specific example. Use correct word choices and grammar: say 'bicycles' or 'bikes are popular' and avoid unclear phrases like 'by star.' Use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'for example') and limit to 2–3 sentences with precise vocabulary (accessible, affordable, practical).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short journeys. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run errands in crowded cities, especially students and low‑income workers.

× Unfortunately not, I did not have bike when I was a child.

✓ Unfortunately not, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the countable singular noun 'bike'. Use 'a' or 'the' when referring to a singular countable noun depending on context; here 'a bike' is correct. Suggestion: Always include an article before singular countable nouns (a/an/the) unless another determiner is used.

× But yes, I got cycle as a present on my 7th birthday from my father.

✓ But yes, I got a cycle as a present on my 7th birthday from my father.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'cycle'. Use 'a cycle' to indicate one item received. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns when mentioning them for the first time.

× It was very useful for me.

✓ It was very useful to me.

The phrase 'useful for me' is not ungrammatical but 'useful to me' is more idiomatic when expressing personal usefulness. This is a preposition usage preference. Suggestion: Use 'useful to me' to describe something that benefited you personally.

× I wrote it every day.

✓ I rode it every day.

The verb 'wrote' is incorrect in context; the intended action with a bike is 'ride' in past tense 'rode'. This is a lexical verb choice error; choose the verb that matches the activity. Suggestion: Use verbs that match the action (ride for bicycles); ensure past tense for past events.

× And uh, I do make me feel more independent and improve my balance as well.

✓ And uh, it made me feel more independent and improved my balance as well.

The original misuses pronouns and verb forms: 'I do make me feel' incorrectly combines subject 'I' with reflexive 'me' and present auxiliary 'do' while context requires past tense. Correct structure uses subject 'it' (the cycle) and past tense verbs 'made' and 'improved'. Suggestion: Match subject and object pronouns correctly and use past tense consistently for past events.

× I believe that by star more popular in my country more than other convenience because it's very convenient, useful and easy to get for everyone, even for a lower class, either middle class.

✓ I believe that bicycles are more popular in my country than others because they are very convenient, useful and easy to get for everyone, even for the lower and middle classes.

This sentence has multiple issues: wrong word 'star' instead of 'are', incorrect comparison structure, incorrect noun choice 'convenience', agreement errors ('it' should be 'they'), and incorrect class references. Correction fixes subject-verb agreement, comparison form, plural agreement, article use and noun forms. Suggestion: Use 'are' for plural subjects, compare 'more ... than ...', use plural pronouns 'they' for plural nouns, and 'lower and middle classes' for social groups.

× So that's why it's very popular.

✓ So that is why they are very popular.

Pronoun and number mismatch: 'it' refers to singular but context discusses 'bicycles' plural. Also 'that's why' is informal contraction but acceptable; adjusting to 'they are' ensures grammatical agreement. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents; use 'they are' for plural subjects.