Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use the past tense for past situations. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences), give a clear topic sentence, and add one brief specific detail or reason using a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g., use "didn't" and "when I was a child") and natural phrasing.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family was small and we couldn't afford one because my parents prioritized food and school expenses.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and use plural nouns and natural collocations (e.g., "bicycles are popular"). Use linking words like "because" or "also" and give one specific reason or example. Improve vocabulary and grammar: use "cheap transportation" → "an inexpensive form of transport" and "improve their health." Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are an inexpensive form of transport. Also, many people ride them for exercise and to stay healthy, especially in small towns where traffic is light.

× No, I don't have a bike when I travel because I come from a little family.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I come from a small family.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Don't have' is present tense; change to 'didn't have'. Also 'little family' is awkward in English for family size; use 'small family'. Suggestion: match tense to the time frame and use natural collocations (small family).

× We don't have enough money to buy a bicycle for me because my parents focus for our meals and our school.

✓ We didn't have enough money to buy a bicycle for me because my parents focused on providing for our meals and school.

The time frame is past, so verbs should be past tense: 'don't have' -> 'didn't have'. 'Focus for' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'focus on' or better 'focused on providing'. 'Our school' is unclear; 'providing for our meals and school' or 'paying for our meals and school expenses' is clearer. Also keep tense consistent with the context (past).

× Of course, bike is very popular in my country because it is a cheap transportation and then people can use it for sport and maybe increase their healthy life.

✓ Of course, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap transportation, and people can use them for exercise and to improve their health.

'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general statement; change verb 'is' to 'are' for agreement. 'A cheap transportation' is incorrect; 'transportation' is uncountable, so 'cheap transportation' or 'a cheap means of transportation' works. 'For sport' is better expressed as 'for exercise'. 'Increase their healthy life' is unnatural; use 'improve their health'. Also ensure pronouns agree in number ('they/them').