Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense and grammar, make your answer more concise and natural, and use linking words to structure details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "when", "then", "so"). Avoid filler phrases like "as like" and correct verb forms ("I was" not "I'm at").

예시: Yes, I did. My dad gave me a bike for my sixth birthday, and it had training wheels at first. When I got used to it, I would spend afternoons riding around the neighborhood with my friends, which remains one of my fondest childhood memories.

제안: Give a clear, direct opinion sentence, then support it with concise, specific reasons and a short contrast. Use formal linking words (e.g., "because", "however", "among") and avoid informal contractions like "cause". Also correct awkward phrases like "at child age" — say "among children" or "for children".

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in China among children because students are often focused on their studies and have little free time. However, cycling is more common among adults, especially for commuting or exercise, since it is economical and good for health.

× My dad brought me a bike as my birthday gift when I'm at the age of 6, and then the bikes first came with training wheels and I spent my afternoon with my friends riding bikes near the neighborhood.

✓ My dad bought me a bike as a birthday present when I was six, and it first came with training wheels. I spent afternoons riding bikes with my friends near the neighborhood.

Mixed and incorrect tenses and word choices: 'brought' is not wrong but 'bought' is more natural for purchasing a gift; 'when I'm at the age of 6' mixes present and past tenses and uses awkward phrasing — correct form is 'when I was six.' 'The bikes first came' is ungrammatical here; use 'it first came with training wheels' to refer to the bike. 'I spent my afternoon' is unnatural in this context: use plural 'afternoons' or 'the afternoons' and position 'with my friends' after the verb phrase. Suggestions: keep past tense consistently for childhood events, use 'bought' or 'gave' depending on intended meaning, and ensure pronouns match singular/plural nouns.

× And this is still as sweet as like, childhood memory for me.

✓ And this is still a sweet childhood memory for me.

Awkward and redundant modifiers: 'as sweet as like' is colloquial and ungrammatical. Use 'a sweet childhood memory' to combine adjective and noun correctly. Also use simple present 'is' to indicate the memory remains. Suggestion: avoid filler words like 'like' and unnecessary comparative structures when making a simple descriptive statement.

× As in China, I don't think bikes are really popular in our country cause students are mainly busy on their academic studies so they don't really have time for leisure activities such as riding bikes.

✓ In China, I don't think bikes are very popular because students are mainly busy with their academic studies, so they don't have time for leisure activities such as riding bikes.

Several preposition and conjunction issues: 'As in China' is awkward; use 'In China.' 'cause' is informal; use 'because.' 'Busy on their academic studies' uses incorrect preposition — correct is 'busy with their academic studies.' Also 'really popular' is acceptable but 'very popular' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('busy with') and formal conjunctions in spoken-test answers.

× So I don't think bikes are popular at child age, but it's kind of popular at the adult age.

✓ So I don't think bikes are popular among children, but they are somewhat popular among adults.

Incorrect noun forms and awkward age expressions: 'at child age' and 'at the adult age' are unidiomatic. Use 'among children' and 'among adults.' Also subject-verb agreement/plurality: 'bikes... it's kind of popular' mismatches plural 'bikes' with singular 'it' — use 'they are' or rephrase to 'cycling is.' Suggestion: use 'among + plural group' to indicate popularity within a demographic and keep pronoun number consistent with the noun.