Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatically accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article errors, avoid repetition, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (e.g., "then", "after that") to sequence events and include one specific detail (where you rode, a memory) to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes — I had a bike that my father gave me for my sixth birthday. It had training wheels at first, and I used to ride it with my friends around our neighborhood every evening after school. Riding it gave me a lot of confidence and many happy childhood memories.

제안: Answer directly, organize ideas with linking words, and use clearer comparisons and specific reasons. Avoid unclear time references and repetition. Offer one clear opinion and support it with a reason or example (e.g., changes in transportation, urban living, or safety concerns). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I think bicycles used to be more popular among previous generations, but fewer young people in my country own them now because cities have more cars and public transport. However, bikes are still valued for leisure and childhood memories, and some people are returning to cycling for exercise and the environment.

× My father bought me a bike as my birthday gift when I'm six and then that bikes like came with came with training wheels.

✓ My father bought me a bike as a birthday gift when I was six, and the bike came with training wheels.

Mixed tense and article errors: 'I'm six' is present tense but should be past 'I was six' because the action happened in the past. 'that bikes like came with came with' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'the bike came with' and 'a birthday gift' is more natural than 'my birthday gift'. Remove filler 'like' for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and simplify phrases. Please note: use past tense for past events, use appropriate articles ('a' or 'the'), and avoid filler words like 'like' in formal sentences.

× At first I used to ride it with my friends after school at the evening like in the neighborhood and then that bike is brought me so much fun and joy.

✓ At first I used to ride it with my friends after school in the evening in the neighborhood, and that bike brought me so much fun and joy.

Several issues combined: 'at the evening' is incorrect preposition and article use; correct is 'in the evening' (preposition of time). 'that bike is brought me' incorrectly uses present passive with 'brought'; the intended meaning is past active 'that bike brought me'. Also removed filler 'like'. Suggestion: use 'in the evening' for time, maintain past tense consistency ('used to' + past simple), and place clauses in natural order.

× I think bikes are popular during like maybe 30 years before of my age, like for Gen. Z, they don't really use to have bikes and somebody still don't really know how to ride a bike.

✓ I think bikes were more popular around thirty years before my age; for Gen Z, they don't really have bikes and some people still don't know how to ride a bike.

Tense and usage errors: 'are popular during like maybe 30 years before of my age' mixes present with past timeframe; 'were more popular around thirty years before my age' expresses past comparison. 'they don't really use to have bikes' incorrectly uses 'use to' instead of 'have' or 'used to' (but here present meaning is 'don't really have'). 'somebody still don't' should be 'some people still don't' for correct pronoun and subject-verb agreement. Suggestions: express past preference with 'were more popular', use 'some people' instead of 'somebody' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× But then I think bikes are really fun and it can really it serves it, it serves as a childhood memory.

✓ But I think bikes are really fun and they can really serve as a childhood memory.

Pronoun and redundancy errors: 'it can really it serves it, it serves' repeats pronouns and verbs incorrectly. 'Bikes' is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'serve'. Remove redundant words. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun (bikes -> they) and keep sentence concise.