Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and natural, but it is slightly long and could be more concise and better structured. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then briefly add one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid small inaccuracies (e.g., “we used to have a motorcycle” is fine but avoid repeating time phrases). Also keep the response to 3–4 sentences maximum.

예시: No, I didn't have a bicycle as a child. Instead, my family owned a motorcycle that my father used to take us to school every day. I remember enjoying the rides because they were faster than walking, and they saved us time on our way to school.

제안: Your response answers the question and gives some detail, but it is incomplete (sentence trailing off) and could be improved with clearer organization and linking words. Begin with a direct opinion, then add specific contrast (city vs rural) using linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand'. Provide one brief reason or example to support your view and finish the sentence fully.

예시: Overall, bicycles are not very popular in my country. However, in rural areas many people still use them for short trips or market runs. In cities, most families own private cars because public transport is limited and distances are longer.

× When I was a child, I didn't have a bike, but I can remember when we were young we used to have a motorcycle that my family owned.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike, but I remember that we used to have a motorcycle that my family owned.

Mixing 'can remember' with past narrative is awkward. Use simple past 'remember' or 'could remember' for past reference. Also add 'that' for clarity. Suggestion: Keep past-tense verbs consistent in a recollection by using 'remember' or 'could remember'.

× My father used that as our means of transportation every time we went to school.

✓ My father used it as our means of transportation every time we took us to school.

The original sentence uses 'used that' which is unnatural: 'use' with a thing takes 'it'. Also 'went to school' is acceptable, but 'took us to school' better conveys the father's action. Ensure object pronoun 'it' replaces 'that' when referring to the motorcycle. Note: If keeping 'went', correct version could be '...every time we went to school' but 'used it' is required.

× In my country bicycles are not that popular.

✓ In my country, bicycles are not very popular.

The phrase 'not that popular' is conversational; 'not very popular' is more appropriate in a formal response. Also add a comma after introductory phrase 'In my country'. Improve formality and clarity.

× However if you go to the rural areas you can find people still using bicycles.

✓ However, if you go to rural areas, you can still find people using bicycles.

Remove the definite article before 'rural areas' unless referring to specific areas. Place commas after introductory clauses. Shift 'still' to natural position before main verb 'find' or before 'using'. Suggested placement: 'you can still find people using bicycles'.

× I live in a city so most of the people there own a private car and.

✓ I live in a city, so most people there own a private car.

The sentence ends with an unfinished conjunction 'and' and has redundant 'the'. Remove 'and' and 'the' before 'people' for natural English. Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses properly.