Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid filler words ("you know", repeated words). Use correct tense and simple grammar (e.g., "When I became an adult, I bought a new one"). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "but" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to ride around my neighborhood and visit friends, but as I grew older I used it less because I started using public transport. When I became an adult, I bought a new bike for exercise and short trips.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Remove hesitation words and repeat phrases. Use linking words such as "because", "for example" and "so" to make your answer coherent. Mention who uses bikes, typical purposes, and maybe a short contrast or result to enrich the response.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles to travel short distances to markets or parks, and students often cycle to school. As a result, cycling is a common and practical way to get around in many towns.

× Yes, yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was, you know, we were small. And as I've grown older, yeah, I, you know, stopped to ride this bike, ride that bike. And when I I when I'm adult, I bought new one.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but we were small. As I grew older, I stopped riding that bike. When I was an adult, I bought a new one.

Multiple tense errors: 'as I've grown older' mixes present perfect with past narrative; use simple past 'As I grew older'. 'stopped to ride' is incorrect; after 'stop' use the gerund for discontinuing an action, so 'stopped riding'. 'when I I when I'm adult' uses wrong tense and repetition; use past 'When I was an adult'. Also add the article 'a' before 'new one'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for a past life story and use correct verb patterns (stop + -ing) and articles. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, exactly. Bikes are uh, famous, yeah, popular in my country 'cause, uh, a lot of people, uh, use it uh, for, uh, going somewhere, uh, you know, like, uh, going somewhere and near to their home, uh, for example, market shops or just, uh, parks, you know.

✓ Yes, exactly. Bikes are popular in my country because a lot of people use them for short trips near their homes, for example to markets, shops, or parks.

Several present-tense and agreement issues: 'Bikes are famous, yeah, popular' is redundant; 'popular' suffices. 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'a lot of people use it' is incorrect because 'bikes' is plural, so pronoun must be 'them'. 'going somewhere and near to their home' is ungrammatical; use 'for short trips near their homes'. Also 'market shops' is awkward; use 'markets' or 'shops'. Suggestion: maintain present simple for general facts, ensure plural agreement between noun and pronoun, and use clearer phrasing for purposes and destinations. Grammar problem type ID:1