Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms, plural/singular agreement, and remove hesitation words like “like” and “umm.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a blue bicycle for my eighth birthday, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood every weekend.

제안: Organize your response: give a clear opinion, then two specific reasons linked with connective words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition and fillers. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘congested’, ‘prefer cycling’).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many streets are narrow and frequently congested, so people often prefer cycling to driving. Also, cycling is inexpensive and provides a relaxing way to commute.

× My parent got me one on my birthday and it was blue, so it's really my favorite.

✓ My parents got me one on my birthday and it was blue, so it was really my favorite.

The noun 'parent' should be plural 'parents' if referring to both; context likely means both parents. Also tense consistency: student uses past narrative; 'it's really my favorite' mixes present with past context, so 'it was really my favorite' matches past-tense story. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to more than one person and keep verb tenses consistent.

× And I got into like a by accident.

✓ And I got into it by accident.

The sentence is ungrammatical because 'a by accident' is incorrect word order and missing object 'it'. The correct phrase is 'by accident' and needs an object 'it' if referring to the bike. Suggestion: place 'by accident' after the verb phrase and include the object: 'I got into it by accident.'

× Yes, I do think that by a popular in my country because many people they prefer cycling to driving because the road in my country are really narrow and a lot of traffic, so it is really easy for them to like umm use the bike and biking make you feel more relaxing as well.

✓ Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in my country because many people prefer cycling to driving. The roads in my country are really narrow and there is a lot of traffic, so it is really easy for them to use bikes, and biking makes you feel more relaxed as well.

Multiple plural/singular issues: 'by a popular' should be 'bikes are popular' (plural noun + verb). Remove redundant pronoun 'they' after 'people'. 'The road' should be plural 'the roads' when speaking generally; verb agreement: 'are really narrow' matches plural 'roads'. 'A lot of traffic' is correct but needs 'there is a lot of traffic' for existence. 'Use the bike' should be 'use bikes' for generalization. 'Biking make' should be 'biking makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'More relaxing' is comparative awkward here; use 'more relaxed' or 'relaxed'. Suggestions: ensure nouns and verbs agree in number, avoid redundant pronouns, and keep general statements in plural form when appropriate.