Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct articles and word order (e.g., “a red bike” not “a red color of bike”) and avoid repetition (remove extra “my”).

예시: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a red bike when I was twelve, and I used it to ride to school and visit friends every weekend.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and then support with specific reasons and a linking word. Use correct noun forms and smoother phrasing (e.g., ‘form of transportation’). Avoid vague phrases like ‘everyone of each of us.’

예시: Yes, they are very popular because bicycles are an affordable and convenient form of transportation. For example, many people cycle to work or school in cities where traffic is heavy, and bicycles are cheap to maintain compared with cars.

× It's a red color of bike my my parents gave me when I was 12 years old.

✓ It was a red bike my parents gave me when I was 12 years old.

The sentence contains an article/word choice error and redundancy. 'a red color of bike' is ungrammatical; use 'a red bike' or 'the color of the bike was red.' Also 'my my' is a repetition error (typo) and should be 'my.' The verb tense should match the question about a past possession, so 'was' fits the description clause referring to the bike.

× It's a red color of bike my my parents gave me when I was 12 years old.

✓ It was a red bike my parents gave me when I was 12 years old.

The original word order ('a red color of bike my parents gave me') is awkward and unclear. Reordering to 'a red bike my parents gave me' makes the modifier placement correct. Also change 'It's' to 'It was' to maintain past-tense consistency with 'gave me when I was 12'. Remove the duplicated 'my'.

× It's one of the most convenient, easiest and cheapest transportation that we can have, like everyone of each of us.

✓ It's one of the most convenient, easiest, and cheapest forms of transportation that we can use, like everyone else.

'Transportation' as an uncountable noun requires 'form(s) of transportation' when enumerating types; using 'one of the' needs a plural noun after it. Also the list of adjectives should be separated by commas and optionally 'and' before the last item for clarity. 'That we can have' is unnatural here; 'that we can use' or 'available to us' is better. 'Like everyone of each of us' is incorrect pronoun/phrase usage; 'like everyone else' is the natural idiom.

× It's one of the most convenient, easiest and cheapest transportation that we can have, like everyone of each of us.

✓ It's one of the most convenient, easiest, and cheapest forms of transportation that we can use, like everyone else.

'Everyone of each of us' is an incorrect pronoun phrase and not idiomatic. Use 'everyone else' to indicate other people in general. Also adjust 'transportation' to 'forms of transportation' to match 'one of the' structure.

× It's one of the most convenient, easiest and cheapest transportation that we can have, like everyone of each of us.

✓ It's one of the most convenient, easiest, and cheapest forms of transportation that we can use, like everyone else.

When combining superlative or comparative adjectives, ensure parallel structure. 'Most convenient' pairs with 'easiest' and 'cheapest' but using 'most' only with 'convenient' is stylistically odd; however it's acceptable if intended. Maintain consistent comparative/superlative forms and comma placement. Also use plural 'forms' to agree with 'one of the'.