Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần chỉnh lại ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và chia động từ để câu tự nhiên hơn; tránh lặp từ và thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn. Sử dụng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi thêm 1-2 câu phụ với liên từ phù hợp (ví dụ: because, so, and). Sửa lỗi thời gian và dạng động từ (ví dụ: “craving” → “craved”, “give” → “gave”). Hạn chế độ dài không quá 3–4 câu.

예시: Yes, I did — it was a present for my sixth birthday. I had really wanted a bike, so my parents gave me one, and I loved it because it let me ride with my friends after school.

제안: Cần dùng thì và số ít/những từ phù hợp (used → use), tránh lặp từ như “really, really”. Sắp xếp câu mạch lạc bằng liên từ (for example, because, such as) và dùng từ đúng cho nhóm tuổi (elders → older people, youngers → young people). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể hoặc so sánh ngắn để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. Giữ độ dài 2–3 câu.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them daily. Older people often cycle for exercise, while students ride to school and many adults commute to work, which makes cycling a convenient and affordable option.

× Yes I did have it was my 6th birthday present.

✓ Yes, I did. It was my 6th birthday present.

The original contains two independent clauses run together (run-on). Separate into two sentences and include a comma after 'Yes'. Also use 'did' as short answer 'Yes, I did.' to answer the question succinctly.

× That time I craving for a bike so my mom and my dad give me a bike as a birthday present and I really love it.

✓ At that time I was craving a bike, so my mom and dad gave me a bike as a birthday present, and I really loved it.

Tense consistency: speaker refers to a past period, so use past continuous 'was craving' and past simple 'gave' and 'loved'. Remove unnecessary 'for' after 'craving' (we say 'craving a bike'). Use 'mom and dad' without repeating 'my'.

× Yes, I think bikes are really, really popular in my country because everyone used it.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really, really popular in my country because everyone uses them.

Present-tense general statement requires present simple 'uses'. 'Everyone' is singular in form but takes third-person singular verb; however 'bikes' is plural so refer with 'them'. Use 'uses' with 'everyone' and 'them' to agree in meaning.

× They, the elders use it for exercising, the youngers use it to go to school and the adults used to go to work.

✓ Elders use them for exercise, young people use them to go to school, and adults use them to go to work.

Word choice and form: 'the elders' and 'the youngers' are unnatural; use 'elders' or 'older people' and 'young people'. 'Use it' should be 'use them' to match plural 'bikes'. Use present simple 'use' for habitual actions. Use 'exercise' (noun) instead of 'exercising' after 'for'. Avoid 'used to' which implies past habit; here it's general.

× It was very convenient.

✓ They are very convenient.

Maintaining present-tense general statement: if speaker is speaking about bikes in general, use present simple 'are'. 'It' is singular and ambiguous; 'they' matches 'bikes' (plural).