Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense consistency, article usage, and word order. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep it under five sentences. For example, say you received the bike as a gift, describe the bike briefly, and explain why you liked it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and it was a small red bicycle with a bell and training wheels. Because it was sturdy and easy to ride, I used it every day to explore my neighborhood and felt very proud of it.

제안: Avoid vague phrases and unclear clauses. Use one clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add concise, specific reasons and an example using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Correct grammar errors like 'are also have' and replace 'individuals' with 'people' or 'many people'.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school, and cities have many bike lanes that make cycling safe and easy.

× Yes, when I was a child I have a bike and it was gifted my my father on my birthday and I really liked it.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike that my father gifted me on my birthday, and I really liked it.

The sentence mixes past context with a present tense verb 'have'; the correct tense is simple past 'had' (Grammar problem type ID 6). Also 'was gifted my my father' is incorrect word order and contains a duplicated 'my'; use active voice 'my father gifted me' or passive 'was gifted to me by my father'. Use commas or conjunctions to join clauses. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and use correct object placement after the verb (e.g., 'my father gifted me').

× Of course, bikes are very popular in my country as many individuals have their own personal bikes and they are also have good grades in my country.

✓ Of course, bikes are very popular in my country, as many people have their own bikes and they are also widely used in my country.

The original sentence misuses 'individuals' (awkward) and includes 'they are also have' which is ungrammatical due to extra auxiliary 'are' before 'have' (this is a subject-verb construction error and pronoun/word choice issue; Grammar problem type ID 12). The intended meaning seems to be that bikes are commonly used, not that they 'have good grades'. Replace with 'widely used' to convey popularity. Also simplify 'their own personal bikes' to 'their own bikes'. Suggestion: choose appropriate pronouns/words and ensure verbs follow correct auxiliary structure (e.g., 'they have' or 'they are used', not 'they are have').