Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use past tense consistently, remove filler words, and make sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting reasons with linking words. Also correct subject-verb agreement and prepositions (e.g., “near the road”, “didn't want me to have a bike”, “get involved in accidents”).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because our house was very close to a busy road. Therefore, my parents worried I might get into an accident, so they didn’t allow me to ride one.

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”, “so”). Use correct nouns and articles (e.g., “bicycles”, “gasoline”).

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because gasoline is expensive. As a result, many people use bikes to commute to work or school; for example, I often see commuters and students cycling to the market and offices.

× Unfortunately I don't have one because umm our house is near in the road and my parents doesn't want me to have bike because there's a lot of vehicles running in front of the house and my parents don't want me to have involved in.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't have one because our house is near the road and my parents didn't want me to have a bike because there were a lot of vehicles running in front of the house and my parents didn't want me to get involved.

Problems identified: incorrect tense (present instead of past), subject-verb agreement (parents doesn't), article and preposition misuse (near in the road), missing article before 'bike', awkward passive/verb phrase 'have involved'. Suggestions: Use past tense 'didn't have' to match 'when you were a child'. Use plural agreement 'parents didn't'. Use correct preposition and article 'near the road'. Add the article 'a bike'. Replace 'don't want me to have involved in' with 'didn't want me to get involved' or 'didn't want me to be involved' to use a correct verb phrase.

× For now I bicycle is very important because a gasoline is too expensive.

✓ Right now, the bicycle is very important because gasoline is too expensive.

Problems: article misuse — 'I bicycle' is incorrect; 'a gasoline' uses incorrect article with an uncountable noun. Suggestions: Use 'the bicycle' if referring generally to the mode or 'a bicycle' for any bicycle; 'gasoline' is uncountable and needs no indefinite article, so use 'gasoline' or 'the price of gasoline'.

× That's why lots of people are riding bicycle, going to work, going to school, even market.

✓ That's why lots of people are riding bicycles, going to work, going to school, even going to the market.

Problems: 'riding bicycle' misses plural and article; gerund phrases parallelism and missing 'going to' before 'the market'. Suggestions: Use plural 'bicycles' or 'riding a bicycle', keep parallel structure with 'going' before each activity, and include 'the' with 'market' or say 'the market'.