Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer clearer, grammatical, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a short supporting detail with correct tense and word choice. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, correct past tense (taught), clear verbs (ride), and one or two supporting details only.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was about ten; my father bought me a colorful one for my birthday. He taught me how to ride it, and after practicing for two or three days I could ride confidently.

제안: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with one or two specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and clearer vocabulary (traffic jams, commute, city center, convenient). Avoid repetition and incoherent fragments.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially in city centers. This is because traffic jams are common, so many people choose bikes to commute quickly and save money.

× Yes, when I was about 10 years old my father bought a colorful bike for me as a birthday present and he teached me how to run it and luckily we I just used about two or three days and I can.

✓ Yes, when I was about 10 years old my father bought a colorful bike for me as a birthday present and he taught me how to ride it, and luckily I learned it in just two or three days.

The main verb describing the teaching happened in the past, so the correct past tense of 'teach' is 'taught' (past tense issue). Also 'run' is incorrect collocation for using a bike; use 'ride'. The clause 'luckily we I just used about two or three days and I can' is ungrammatical: it should state that the speaker learned in two or three days, using past tense ('learned') to match the timeline. Suggestions: use correct past tense verbs ('taught', 'learned') and appropriate verbs for activities ('ride' a bike). Use clear subject pronouns and remove extra words like 'we' that do not fit the sentence.

× We are in China bikes very very popular like in the city center causes always have a traffic jam and you have to drive like a bike, like a model and any stuffs to go.

✓ In China, bikes are very, very popular, especially in city centers because there are often traffic jams, so you have to use a bike, a scooter, or other things to get around.

The original sentence has multiple preposition and word choice errors. 'We are in China' is incorrect contextually; to state a general fact use 'In China'. 'like in the city center causes always have a traffic jam' mixes clauses incorrectly and misuses prepositions — correct phrasing is 'especially in city centers because there are often traffic jams'. Also 'you have to drive like a bike' is wrong verb and preposition: people 'ride' a bike and 'use' a bike to get around. Suggestions: begin location phrases with 'In' for general statements, use 'because' for reason clauses, and choose correct verbs for transport ('ride', 'use') and clearer nouns ('get around').

× It can avoid it, it can.

✓ It can help avoid them.

The phrase 'It can avoid it, it can' is awkward and redundant. Use 'help avoid' plus appropriate object. Also number agreement: 'traffic jams' is plural, so use 'them' if referring back, or rephrase as 'avoid traffic jams'. The modal 'can' is fine but avoid repeating it unnecessarily. Suggestion: use concise phrasing like 'It can help avoid traffic jams.'