Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical mistakes (e.g. "more safer" → "safer"). Use a phrase to conclude if needed. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: No, I never owned a bike as a child. I often watched other children riding, but I have always been afraid of cycling because I worry about accidents and getting injured. For that reason, I prefer walking or using public transport rather than learning to ride.

제안: Give a clear main statement then support it with specific, well-linked details about regions and reasons. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g. "bites" → "bikes", "two bikes pick up" unclear). Use linking words like "however" and "because" to make connections. Limit to three sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, bikes are popular overall, but popularity varies by region. For example, in urban northern and central areas many people use bicycles for short trips, however in southern and rural regions people prefer cars and motorcycles because distances are larger and roads are less safe for cycling.

× No, I never owned a bike, but I saw other children riding the bike and even as an adult I'm so afraid of bikes because I know that it can hurt easily and other things.

✓ No, I never owned a bike, but I saw other children riding bikes and even as an adult I'm so afraid of bikes because I know that they can cause injury easily.

The sentence incorrectly mixes singular and plural forms: 'other children riding the bike' should be 'riding bikes' to match the plural subject 'children' (singular/plural issue). Also 'it can hurt easily' is vague and uses singular pronoun 'it' to refer to plural 'bikes'; use 'they can cause injury' for clarity and correct agreement. Suggestion: match noun number with the subject and use plural pronouns for plural antecedents. Next corrections address additional problems below.

× I think it's more safer to be on my own than not to own or ride a bike.

✓ I think it's safer to be on my own than to own or ride a bike.

The phrase 'more safer' is redundant and ungrammatical because 'safer' is already the comparative form; adding 'more' is incorrect (incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Remove 'more' and keep 'safer'. Also change 'than not to own or ride a bike' to 'than to own or ride a bike' for parallel structure. Next sentence corrections follow.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country, but in certain parts of the country, not all in the northern region and in the southern region but in the western and eastern South of the country bites are no popular.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, but not in all regions: they are popular in the northern and southern regions, but in the western and eastern parts of the south of the country bikes are not popular.

This sentence has incorrect pluralization and word choice: 'bites are no popular' appears to be misspelling and wrong order. Use 'bikes are not popular'. Also the sentence structure was confusing; reword to clarify regions and ensure correct singular/plural forms (singular/plural issue and word order). Ensure 'bikes' plural agrees with 'are not popular'. Next correction.

× They prefer a four wheel vehicle as in cars and two bikes pick up.

✓ They prefer four-wheel vehicles such as cars and pickup trucks, and sometimes two-wheel scooters.

Original sentence misuses pronouns and nouns: 'a four wheel vehicle as in cars' is awkward, and 'two bikes pick up' is ungrammatical. Clarify with correct noun forms and examples. Use plural agreement 'vehicles' and correct compound nouns 'four-wheel', 'pickup truck', and 'two-wheel scooter' depending on intended meaning. This fixes incorrect pronoun/noun usage and improves clarity.