Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child."), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words (e.g., "because my family couldn't afford one"). Avoid irrelevant emotional remarks unless you expand on them with reasons. Keep answers natural and concise (1–3 sentences).

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. As a result, I often walked to school and sometimes felt disappointed when my classmates rode past me.

제안: Make the answer more specific, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific reason or example using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use correct verb forms and count nouns ("many bicycles", "every child has"). Limit to 2–3 sentences for effectiveness.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable way to travel short distances. For example, most children own a bicycle — my daughter has one too and enjoys riding it to the park.

× No, we haven't much money.

✓ No, we didn't have much money.

The student used 'haven't' (present perfect) incorrectly for a past situation. The correct tense is simple past 'didn't have' because the question asks about childhood. Use 'didn't have' to refer to a past state.

× That's why I didn't buy bicycle in my childhood.

✓ That's why I didn't have a bicycle in my childhood.

The phrase 'buy bicycle' is odd here and 'in my childhood' is acceptable but less natural. The intended meaning is past possession, so use 'didn't have a bicycle'. Also include the indefinite article 'a' before 'bicycle'. Use simple past for a past period.

× I'm upset for this.

✓ I'm upset about this.

The correct preposition to express feelings about something is 'about', not 'for'. 'Upset for this' is incorrect; use 'upset about this' to indicate the cause of the feeling.

× Yes, in our country the bike is very popular.

✓ Yes, in our country bikes are very popular.

The sentence uses 'the bike' (singular) but refers generally to the type of transport; use plural 'bikes are' for a general statement. Also match subject and verb: 'bikes are' rather than 'the bike is' for general frequency.

× Every child have every child has many bicycles.

✓ Every child has many bicycles.

The original repeats and mixes forms and uses 'have' with the singular subject 'every child'. With singular indefinite expressions like 'every child', use third person singular 'has'. Remove redundancy.

× Now I have a daughter, she has also a bicycle and she likes to drive driving.

✓ Now I have a daughter; she also has a bicycle and she likes to ride it.

The phrase 'drive driving' is incorrect. For bicycles, native speakers use 'ride' rather than 'drive'. Also 'she has also a bicycle' is awkward; place 'also' before the verb or after the subject: 'she also has a bicycle'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid comma splice.