Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repetition. For example, use past simple to describe possession and any relevant anecdote, and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My father bought me a small, bright red bicycle when I was very young, and I remember practicing in the park until I learned to ride without help.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons. Use linking words (for example, because, however, therefore) and avoid hesitations and repetition. Be specific about who buys bikes and why (e.g., students, commuters, for exercise). Keep responses to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and avoid traffic. For example, students and office workers often choose bicycles for cost-effective and healthy travel.

× Actually, no, I didn't. But when I was child, my father about a fantastic and beautiful bicycle for me because, uh, I'm a very baby.

✓ Actually, no, I didn't. But when I was a child, my father bought a fantastic and beautiful bicycle for me because I was very young.

This sentence has multiple issues fitting 'Sentence structure errors' and 'Past tense issue'. The phrase 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a'. 'my father about a fantastic...' is ungrammatical and appears to be a missing verb; the intended verb is 'bought', which must be in the past tense to match 'when I was a child'. 'I'm a very baby' mixes present tense and incorrect noun usage; it should be 'I was very young' to match past-time context. Suggestions: add the article 'a' before 'child', use the past tense verb 'bought' for the father's action, and replace 'I'm a very baby' with 'I was very young' to use correct noun/adjective and tense consistency.

× Actually, I, I'm not sure, but uh, recently, uh and some people, uh, most of people, uh, umm, will buy, buy, Oh no, we'll buy, uh, buy a bike because.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure, but recently many people will buy a bike.

This sentence contains disfluency and article errors. 'most of people' should be 'most people' or 'most of the people'; the original is missing 'the' if using 'of'. The phrase is also wordy and contains repeated filler words; streamline to 'many people' or 'most people'. Modal/future usage 'will buy' is acceptable if discussing future tendency, but repeated 'buy' and 'we'll' are inconsistent; choose one subject. 'a bike' is correct as an indefinite article before singular noun. Suggestions: remove fillers, use 'many people' or 'most people', and keep a single future verb form 'will buy'.