Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and coherence: use past tense consistently, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep answers natural and concise (max 4–5 sentences). For example, say when you got the bike, how you used it, and a brief memory or feeling. Avoid unnecessary words like “umm.”

예시: Yes. I had a small bicycle when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was four, and I used to ride it every afternoon in the park. I remember learning to balance with her holding the seat, and I felt very proud the first time I rode by myself.

제안: Work on accuracy, vocabulary, and organization: correct key words (bikes, walkers), use linking words (because, for example), and give specific reasons or examples. Form one clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 supporting details with correct grammar. Remove fillers like “umm.”

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many students and office workers use bikes to commute short distances, and cities with bike lanes make cycling safer. As a result, cycling is a common choice for daily travel.

× When I was a child, I have a small bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a small bike.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; change to 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs consistently when talking about past events.

× I still remember our learning right back in the park.

✓ I still remember learning right there in the park.

The original has awkward phrasing and a possessive 'our' that does not fit. The action 'learning' is a gerund; pair it with 'remember' without 'our'. 'Right back' is unnatural here; 'right there' or simply 'there' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'remember' + gerund and choose appropriate adverb ('there').

× I would say yes, umm, the bags are popular in my country.

✓ I would say yes, umm, bikes are popular in my country.

The student likely meant 'bikes' but wrote 'bags'. This is a word choice rather than grammar, but it causes subject-verb mismatch in context. Replace with the intended noun 'bikes' to make the sentence coherent. Suggestion: check that the noun matches the topic and plural form.

× Uh, it's really convenient for young people such as students and Walker.

✓ Uh, they're really convenient for young people such as students and walkers.

'It's' (it is) incorrectly refers to 'bikes' which is plural; use 'they're' for plural. 'Walker' should be plural and lowercase 'walker' is awkward; 'walkers' (people who walk) is possible but odd—better to say 'commuters' or 'pedestrians'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun and pluralize occupations or groups when generalizing.

× It's really umm, it's good for go to the places are commit.

✓ They're really good for going to places and commuting.

This sentence has multiple issues: wrong pronoun number ('it's' vs plural), incorrect verb form 'go' should be gerund 'going' after 'good for', and 'are commit' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'commuting'. Rephrase to 'good for going to places and commuting'. Suggestion: use 'good for' + gerund and choose the correct noun/verb 'commuting' for travel by bike.