Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea. Use past tense consistently and replace vague phrases like "during poverty" with clearer expressions (e.g. "because my family couldn't afford one").

예시: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I really wanted to learn to ride, so I practiced balancing on a makeshift wooden frame and watched other children ride to learn from them.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then add specific supporting details with linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement and remove filler phrases. Include examples or reasons (e.g. commuting, exercise, leisure) to make your answer specific.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for short commutes and exercise, so you often see groups of cyclists in parks and students riding to school, which shows how common and enjoyable cycling is.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child because we cannot afford, but I really wanted to practice the bike so that I will have an experience in how to ride it.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because we couldn't afford one, but I really wanted to practice riding a bike so that I could have experience in how to ride it.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses ('don't have' with 'when I was a child') and uses incorrect modal tense ('will' instead of past possibility 'could'). Use past simple consistently for past facts: 'didn't have' and 'couldn't afford'. Also use 'could' for past ability/possibility ('could have experience') and use the verb pattern 'practice riding a bike' rather than 'practice the bike.' Add 'one' after 'afford' for clarity.

× But unfortunately, as mentioned, I don't have a bike during poverty.

✓ But unfortunately, as mentioned, I didn't have a bike when we were poor.

The clause refers to a past state ('during poverty') so present 'don't have' is incorrect; use past 'didn't have'. 'During poverty' is unnatural; use 'when we were poor' to describe past financial hardship. Maintain consistent past tense.

× I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Subject-verb agreement is correct: plural subject 'bikes' with 'are'.

× Most of the people knows how to bike and they when I saw them, they really enjoy biking and it's it feels like it's enjoyable.

✓ Most people know how to ride a bike, and when I see them they really enjoy biking; it feels enjoyable.

There are several issues: 'Most of the people knows' has incorrect agreement — use 'Most people know' (plural subject with base verb). 'How to bike' is awkward; use 'how to ride a bike.' Tense inconsistency: 'when I saw them' mixes past with present context; choose present 'when I see them' or past consistently; here present is appropriate. 'They really enjoy biking' is correct when made present. Remove redundant words 'it's it feels like it's enjoyable' and simplify to 'it feels enjoyable' or 'they seem to enjoy it.'